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PostSubject: Kuroi, Hinode [Kiri Genin] Sat 22 May 2010, 4:21 am

Basic Information:

Name:
Hinode Kuroi Ashigaru
Secondary Title:
Black swordsman
Age:
13
Gender:
male
Physical Appearance:
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His eyes hold a blood red hue that seems to eat light that shines into them rather then reflecting it off as normal peoples do and seem to give off an eerie glow in the night or in dark places. The shadows seem to roll off of his cloak and follow him where he goes sliding across the walls in his wake and leaping out where they should not. His perfect smile is only another attribute to his menacing form showing teeth that never seem quite right with fangs sticking out from his lips as he grins. He always wears a smile that never seems to hold mirth or touch his eyes and completely betrays his seemingly calm nature. The only times his eyes show a real emotion is when he is truly enjoying himself

The cloak he wears is black with red embroidery that never seems to stay in the same place. His ears are set back a little farther on his head and end in a crisp point. His hair is semi-long and flows strait and never seems to be affected by the wind at all, or rather always is affected by the wind when there is none present. It hangs strait but always seems to wave as the light changes and the red streaks shift and melt away or reappear. There is a tattoo that can be hidden depending on how his hair that is placed on his forehead. It is suspected to be a seal of some sort because of its appearance. It seems to be like moving water and never seems to stay the same color or shade as if watching the rolling of waves.


Personality:
This man has a very strange personality depending on the times at which you catch him. most often he is cold to those he does not know and he rarely shows mirth but rather meets everything with a seemingly harsh logic. to those he does know he can be quite friendly and smooth of tongue, often throwing a quick compliment or a critic depending on the situation. he has a rather short temper and will be quick to resort to violence. there are many times where he will be carefree and quite happy even though it would be odd, and is most often in this mood during a time of combat or shortly before or after.

he loves a good fight and will often times go out of his way to get one. he will be calm about an opponent, sizing them up carefully in his mind to see where the true advantage lies, and will often choose himself as the lesser combatant. He loves a chalange and will often times give himself some sort of handicap if it is needed for a good fight. he will be civil and usually announce himself to an opponent who is not already aware of his presense.

Catch Phrase:
"I'll turn out the light, and murder the dawn"
"I thought I told you I was looking for a GOOD fight"

Clan Information:

Clan Name:
Ashigaru
Clan Location:
Everywhere
Clan Traits:
Secret Techniques, Weaponry.
Kekkei Genkai:
none
Secret Clan Jutsu:
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History:
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The history of your Clan. Were did they originate? How did they come to be? This part should be very descriptive and at least two paragraphs. Also include a Clan Symbol in space provided if your clan has one.
Clan Details:
State whether your clan is open to the site, or is closed for your use only. A simple 'Open' or 'Closed' will do.

Rank Information:

Rank:
Genin.
Village Affiliation:
Kirigakure

Special Information:

Character Speciality:
Main: weaponry (swords and ranged)
Sub: medical (no it is not restricted by clan)
Elemental Affinity:
Main: Wind
Sub: Lightning
Special Characteristics:
young swordsman- through countless nights of training Kuroi has mastered the art of the blade, he has made an almost unique bond with the type of weapon where it acts almost as an extension of his body, it hinders him not whatever position he might be in and can draw on a dime whenever there is the possibility of a threat. He has mastered the feel of swords that he can pick up a new sword and wield it as though he has used it his entire life

Skill Information:

Jutsu:
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medical jutsu
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Weapon Template:
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[center]Background Information

History:
Ceremony
Kuroi Hinode was born on the day of a solar eclipse. His parents thought this to be a bad omen when the child took its first breaths. As all children, he was dressed in the ancestral warpaint, but for the occasion in a strait black color. As he was laid to rest on the ancient shrine the child quickly found peace and was soon still from his crying, the elders saw promise in this newborn. Those who were present to give his name thought to the solar eclipse and arrived for the name Kuroi Hinode, "black sunrise". "Young child, you are to be a warrior, your meaning to bring death to your enemies and uphold the honor of the Ashigaru" With those words spoken, it was finally time for him to brought before his mother, the woman beamed as her child was brought forth, taking only a short time for the ceremony was filled with a pride in the child she had brought forth.

Childhood
Being raised in this group of children rose no problems with the young child. He watched learned and cooperated with the "den mothers" set to take care of them and wass very appreciative. he got along well with these other children, and often times would wrestle with them to test eachothers strength. Boys and girls alike joined in these small frays and those who watched over seemed simply ammused rather then angry, only stopping a match when there was a risk for true harm to one of the children saying "battle scars will come from true battle" he looked up the first time he had heard this saying, not truly knowing its meaning but had began to form a close bond with the cildren of his small group, his "family". He couldn't wait for what was to come, he had heard rumors from the adults talking about promise from the pack he had been raised in, and when they all came of age it would be a glorious training.

His true birthday
At the age of five his small family was seperated for another ceremony. At this time he was given his first sword. "Now your life truly begins. At your birth there was a right given to you, and it was to be a warrior. Now is the time to take up that right" Kuroi nodded slowly and bowed and attached the scabbard to his waist and went forward to reunite with his family. The other children came forth with a different veriety of weapons and warpaint across their faces, showing the diversity among the clan, but one that was good, it showed the true strength that they were all able to come together. Before them stood an elderly man, one who stood with such a deadly form that it was known even to the new warriors his capability. "from this day on, you will live as true members of the ashigaru clan." the older men and women who had performed their rites let out a roar of bestial wrath that would striek fear into those who knew such a word. and the young ones quickly joined in

Training
Kuroi learned quickly in some areas and lacked in others, to him the katana that was given to him seemed almost natural, and something that seemed off was that he was able to specialize in ranged weaponry as well. this was somewhat odd to the elders training him. he wielded a blade with such alacrity that those around him could not keep up, but fell short with other traditional weaponry, and the array of ranged weapons also surprised those who oversaw his training. This strange boy was able to pick up a bow and mark a target 50 yards down range without any real thought to it, and perform wonderfully with a few of the more strange ranged weapons, ones very rarely used such as the Rope dart and Meteor hammer. It took some time but they eventually began to think that this child might be of the few that have another talent other then weapons, and so took him to the medical branch of the clan. Inside were a few people that did not seem to wish to be there but obviously dealt with it. "ahhh a new possible student for us, this should be interesting" Kuroi looked up at the people and let out a long sigh "but I want to go fight". they merely replied to him "without medics any army will fall, your path is your path" with that they turned and left

medical
Kuroi stayed and trained as a medic as he was told, but never stopped going to the fields to practice with his weapons either. he put a large amount of work into both of them although dreading the book work of becoming a medic did so without complaint. he would still be able to wreak havoc on the battle field, and now was merely given a different tool in which to do so. He studied hard and learned the anatomy required and how the human body worked as well as how to manipulate it to do his will in another target. he studied hard and trained hard with his strong suits, the blade that hung at his hip never left even in sleep as it became a part of him, he rarely removed the ranged weapons wrapped about his body unless for training or combat and practiced everyday and often times at night. his main focus remained his weapons but he never slacked in his medical training, advancing quickly as the years went by and was respected both as a warrior and one of great knowledge and medical capabilities

parting
It finally came time where Kuroi was contracted with a shinobi village Kirigakure at the age of 9. Those he had trained with had small gifts for him, a seemingly normal katana made of a different material. "this will absorb your chakra's nature and allow you to incorperate it with the blade, how to do so will be yours to find out, its balanced as well so you may use it off hand just as effectivly as strong hand" from his medical teacher who had grown somewhat fond of his young student. and as he left, the man who he spent most of his time training under with his weapons presented him with the traditional ashigaru equipment as well as a few other choice weapons. a Bow and set of finely crafted arrows, as well as the two other ranged weapon Kuroi enjoyed using, a rope dart and meteor hammer. "may these weapons serve you well on the battle field young warrior" with that, he was applied the traditional warpaint of their clan and sent forth to his new home

academy
He did not take part in the traditional combat given his unique talents as a medic, and was saddened by this, but he was still chosen to go to an academy, he was trained in their secret jutsu, and took to them quickly given his knowledge of medical jutsu, as well as was able to pic up a few other useful jutsu taught to basic academy students. he was able to learn, shunshin, string reeling, and Bikou Ninjutsu - Shadowing Stealth Technique. in this new home he got along fairly well, and even heard rumors of another from the ashigaru clan here. he was now interested in something that would keep his old roots alive, and someone as drawn to battle as he may be here. he went along with the academy for 4 years until finally he graduated to become a genin.


Role-Play Sample:
Kuroi Hinode sighed as the next patient was brought in from the arena, his eyes looked on the combatant with scorn and jealousy. He had not been allowed in the fighting merely on the basis he would be more use for this, cleaning up the messes that their opponents left. As a medic he was not in alot of the fighting, though he wished to be, and was refrained from most of the training. Luckily he was able to find a man willing to teach him at nights after he was done with his book work. But now the task at hand was to prep these who were beaten in combat for treatment, and the wounds were in no way simple to clean. Wounds ranging from large gashes to simple cuts littered the body of the losers and often times just as many as the winners.

He took traditional means to clean them instead of using the simple jutsu that he was taught, taking alcohal and sometimes salt if the wound was bad enough to cleanse and prepare the wound, and often times if there was the time he would stitch them together himself if his teacher was busy. He sighed with a steady hand as he took the needle to the wound that needed them and bandaged the rest that did not. he was not gentle about treating these patients and they knew it, and quite often didnt expect it. There was a pause before the final bout, in which time he was lucky enough to quell the flow of injured and was able to watch this final match from the sideline. he stood watching the two fight, picking out several weak spots in the attacks and defence of either side with a sigh. "both use swords... and neither could come close to matching me... why was I stuck here" he whispered to himself and turned to walk away before seeing the outcome of the match "there are only two left, I will leave them to you sensei... I'm gonna go practice more." He stalked from the room at a steady pace, his teacher knew the dislike of being unable to participate in the tournament but let it go unsaid, he was more use here judging from the wounds the combabtants held, and his teacher feared he would have killed several of his opponents.


Last edited by Mitsuhide Aketchi on Mon 24 May 2010, 1:33 am; edited 5 times in total
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PostSubject: Re: Kuroi, Hinode [Kiri Genin] Sat 22 May 2010, 9:18 am

Mitsuhide Aketchi wrote:

Special Information:

Character Speciality:
You may pick 2 skills: Ninjutsu, Genjutsu, Taijutsu, Kenjutsu, Weaponry, Medical, Puppetry, Fuuinjutsu
Main: weaponry (swords and ranged)
Sub: medical (no it is not restricted by clan)
Elemental Affinity:
What element(s) your character possesses, no more than two
Main: Wind
Sub: Lightning
Special Characteristics:
young swordsman- through countless nights of training Kuroi has mastered the art of the blade, he has made an almost unique bond with the type of weapon where it acts almost as an extension of his body, it hinders him not whatever position he might be in and can draw on a dime whenever there is the possibility of a threat. He has mastered the feel of swords that he can pick up a new sword and wield it as though he has used it his entire life

Skill Information:
Note: You can find the other templates in the other Creation Areas if your character needs them.


- All the words highlighted in red can be taken out. Also, your weapons aren't in the spoiler tag. You still have to add the last half of the coding.




Mitsuhide Aketchi wrote:

Name: Kiyomaru (Cleanse)
Rank: C
Type: medical
Element: none
Description: It is not always possible for a medical nin to practice basic hand washing and other procedures. This technique has the effect of instantly removing bacteria, dirt, blood, and other contaminants from the user‟s hands, lower arms, and face. It also insures that any breath that comes from the user‟s body will be free of any bacteria or infectious disease. This technique can also be used to clean the wounds of others in order to prevent infection from bacteria. It the event that the medical nin is using this technique to prevent infection of an injury that has been inflicted upon them, it is used as if the shinobi were using it on somebody else.

The first half is fine, but for the second half, you should just add this jutsu --

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Mitsuhide Aketchi wrote:
Name: Keksuki Gyouko (Blood Coagulation)
Rank: C-B
Type: medical
Element: none
Description: A simple healing technique. The user uses his chakra on a wound to make the blood there coagulate and stop bleeding. This is primarily used as a preliminary treatment option as it does not close wounds. The bleeding from superficial wounds can easily be stopped but deep wounds can require several minutes to stop.
C: 2 posts depending on severity
B: 1 post depending on severity

- This is actually just D ranked.

Mitsuhide Aketchi wrote:
Name: Gantai no Jutsu (Bandage Skill)
Rank: C
Type: medical
Element: none
Description: Bandages can mean the difference between life and death but unfortunately bandages can run out. Medical nin have learned to make temporary bandages from their surroundings. Objects such as grass, sand, water and many others can be woven together over a wound to create a temporary bandage. The bandage lasts for about five minutes without a supply of chakra from the medical nin.

- This is also D ranked.





- Your rp sample could do some grammar edits and punctuation edits. Also, your rp sample is 1106 words long. If you don't at least plan on rping between 900-1100 words then you need to decrease it.

- Your last three weapon's origins need at least two or three more sentences.


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PostSubject: Re: Kuroi, Hinode [Kiri Genin] Sat 22 May 2010, 9:25 pm

all but RP sample fixed will work on that soon (probly just make a whole new one)

-edit RP sample shortened, and a bit better grammar/punctuation
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PostSubject: Re: Kuroi, Hinode [Kiri Genin] Mon 24 May 2010, 12:36 am

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PostSubject: Re: Kuroi, Hinode [Kiri Genin] Mon 24 May 2010, 12:53 am

Your sword styles... I believe you should put them in the jutsu template. Something kinda like this -

Name: Apple Blossoms in the Wind
Rank: C
Type: Weaponry Fighting Style
Element: N/A
Description: A versatile technique, intended for use against an ambush by multiple opponents. The blade is held low, but ready for use in a number of strike forms. Keep loose and move slowly.
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PostSubject: Re: Kuroi, Hinode [Kiri Genin] Mon 24 May 2010, 12:54 am

they are not jutsu, any person in real life could do them, its simply a reference I use when fighting with a sword to assist in description of what I'm doing. if it would be better for me to remove them altogether I will do so, most sites likes them in the char app though, so I put them in

edit- just removed them for simplicity, its not exactly the kind of sword style you all looking for anyways
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PostSubject: Re: Kuroi, Hinode [Kiri Genin] Mon 24 May 2010, 1:37 am

Ah, the rest looks good to me.

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