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PostSubject: Yamanaka, Fei [...Done] Wed 29 Sep 2010, 11:52 pm

...Here I am again. I have this terrible feeling that I somehow got it all wrong (haven't played RPG before and creating a character out of the blue is kinda hard). Oh well, this sucks. Why deny it? I messed up the jutsus completely and the history is way too angsty...
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Basic Information:

Name: Yamanaka Fei

Secondary Title: None

Age: Twelve

Gender: Female

Physical Appearance: Fei is a tall (5’3’’), gangly, painfully thin girl whose height makes her appear older than she actually is, until one looks at her childlike, round-shaped face. She has a pale complexion, high cheek bones and large bright blue eyes – either half-lidded, as she peeks lazily through her thick blond lashes; or wide open and dreamy, giving her an oafish look. Such impression is further accentuated by Fei’s habit of breathing through her mouth, thin lips parted in wonder – ‘gaping like a fish’, many would say. Fei can also look quite shy with the way she ducks her head and uses her short blond hair to hide her features, softly mumbling a greeting.

Unlike most stupid-looking people, though, Fei doesn’t often stare - unless she wants to seem even more moronic –, but lets her eyes wander, drinking everything in with one slow, smooth gaze. She is very fond of crowded places and blends well into the background, with her quiet movements and unremarkable appearance.

Fei dresses casually – civilian clothes – T-shirts of neutral colors and jeans plus battered, worn down trainers who look like they’ve walked many roads. She also carries an innocent-looking bag filled with kunai, shuriken and some exploding tags on her left shoulder. Her headband is usually left inside the bag – when she is out on missions, Fei ties it backwards around her neck so it’s covered, only showing it to identify herself as a kunoichi. Most people never realize she is a ninja.

(I actually could find a picture but I think it's too big. Anyway, the link is here.)

Personality: Fei is very quiet, and keeps her thoughts to herself – she can be bold, but minds her tongue because she’s afraid of offending someone mindlessly. Fei is a good listener, and because she has nobody to talk to, she’s made an habit out of listening to conversations of random, unknown people – she has also a good memory – but never tells anybody what she heard, because, then again, she has nobody to talk to (and she’d be mortified if anybody found out she eavesdrops). Fei likes analyzing things deeply, but gets annoyed if she has to express her opinions – she has a strong sense of ridicule and is a very private person.

One thing that aggravates Fei are people who don’t behave properly. It’s hypocritical, as she isn’t a polite girl herself, but after watching human interactions for a while, she understands that social conventions and behavioral rules are meant to be followed. As such, Fei is extremely self-conscious and will notice immediately if somebody is thinking (or thinking about thinking) ill of her – in which case she will excuse herself and leave (as Fei tends to avoid people/things she isn’t comfortable with).

She likes doing things at her own pace, doesn’t make friends easily and dislikes people meddling with her affairs. Fei also dislikes attention, as well as holding conversations for extended periods of time – when confronted with small talk, Fei will listen, but simply agree with her interlocutor to spare energy. Overall, Fei has a cool, apathetic nature – she rarely acts up on her feelings, and when she does, she plans what she’ll do first… slowly.

Fei believes there’s a lie on every belief and thus she doesn’t knows what to believe, her only absolute truth being that flowers are beautiful. She spends a lot of her time taking care of the greenhouse on her backyard – an inheritance from her mother. If Fei were to die immediately, she wouldn’t miss anything in this world but camellias.

Catch Phrase: ''I don't mind.'' or ''I don't know.''


Clan Information:

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The last line of the Yamanaka's history says that they never ceased to fail to support Konoha. Are they that incompetent or is it a mistake?


Rank Information:

Rank: Genin

Village Affiliation: Suna


Special Information:

Character Speciality:
Main: Ninjutsu
Sub: Genjutsu
Elemental Affinity:
Main: Wind
Sub: Fire
Special Characteristics:
- Fei can adapt. Whenever she arrives somewhere, Fei is quick to pick up how people act there and mimic them – those who don’t stand out are less likely to be noticed, or recalled.
- Fei likes to observe people and has a knack for remembering names and stories – not so much for faces, though.
- Fei has broken her right arm twice (or rather, had it broken by her stepmother), and had to adapt to doing things with her left one. She found it an useful skill to have and practiced it more.
- Fei is an abnormally light sleeper, and any little noise or movement will wake her up.


Skill Information:
Note: You can find the other templates in the other Creation Areas if your character needs them.

Academy Jutsu:

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Clan Jutsu:

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Wind Jutsu:

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Fire Jutsu:

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Genjutsu:

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Background Information

History:

Birth Arc: Yamanaka Fei was born to Yamanaka Kaori - a jounin medic who had migrated from Konoha to Suna - and Takamura Takeo, a civilian baker. (Much to Takeo’s displeasure, his wife kept the Yamanaka clan name.) After she gave birth, Kaori took a leave from work, which was prolonged by a second pregnancy. When Fei was two years old they buried Takushi, her stillborn brother whose death left Kaori struggling with a cleverly concealed postpartum depression – so Fei got stuck with an absent father and a neglectful mother. The situation reached its climax when Kaori forgot her daughter at the supermarket, leading the former kunoichi to realize she needed to ‘stop acting like an emotional fool and get a grip’.

By the time Fei turned three, her mother had recovered and was thinking about getting back to her work as a ninja. Fei’s first clear memories are of her parents arguing, either in hushed whispers or loud screams – Takeo forbid Kaori from doing missions and Kaori laughed at him. When his wife missed Fei’s fifth birthday due to duty, Takeo left home – Fei visited him once or twice, though Kaori’s reconciliation efforts visibly lessened after her ex-husband remarried. Fei saw her mother crying once. They never talked about it and Fei soon learned to be silent.

Academy Arc: Fei did just fine in Academy. She was even first of her class for a few weeks when she was seven, but wasn’t able to keep the position due to her lack of effort. She knew she didn’t train enough and she knew she could do better, but the lessons never interested her and she preferred to learn ‘better’ things from her mother when Kaori came back from missions. It was by that time Fei met her first and only friend – Shizuka, a girl who had approached her at lunch and persevered despite Fei’s silence and ‘excuse me, do I know you?’ look. Time passed, and Shizuka invited herself to Fei’s house.

Shizuka liked everything, was very surprised by the fact Fei lived alone most of the time and begged for half an hour until Fei reluctantly let her into Kaori’s greenhouse – flowers were a rarity in Suna. Once they entered it, Shizuka fell in love with some red camellias – noticing her friend’s enamored gaze, Fei immediately told her ‘no.’ Shizuka wanted to take a bouquet of camellias and was even more adamant about it because Fei never really denied her anything if she insisted, except now. Shizuka gave in, and it was not until she left Fei noticed the camellias were missing. The betrayal wounded Fei deeply. She spent the next week glaring at Shizuka, and even put some extra effort into learning the Mind Transfer Jutsu as vague plans of revenge haunted her mind. And then Shizuka died, along with some other academy students who tried to learn a wind jutsu that was clearly too much for them.

Fei felt terribly guilty and would have thought herself an awful person, if her mother hadn’t telepathically helped her – they never talked out loud about anything important. ‘You love her even when you don’t, and those kind of feelings are the strongest – they fight.’ They put some camellias on Shizuka’s grave and Fei told Kaori – telepathically – that she loved her. It was the last thing Fei told her mother before Kaori went MIA.

Now she had to live with Takeo, and her stepmother, Maki. Still shaken by Shizuka’s death and even more by Kaori’s disappearance, Fei fell into depression. It took her three weeks to say ‘Good Morning’ to her father, and the moment she did, she had her life threatened by Maki – a retired chunin – who made her promise she wouldn’t try to talk to her father or ‘take him from her’ in any way. And so Fei fell into silence again. Sometimes she pretended she was the one that had disappeared, and sometimes she almost believed it, until Maki glared at her with such hatred she became conscious of her existence.

Fei moved back to her mother’s house right after Maki got pregnant – she was nine then – and it felt strangely empty now she knew Kaori wasn’t going to arrive. Fei busied herself with the flowers and, one day, her mother did come back. Kaori was broken, crippled and insane – and there was nothing Fei could do. It was Takeo’s comment ‘I knew she was going to end up that way’, that motivated Fei to visit her mother every day and never give up. Shortly before Fei’s graduation, Kaori died, leaving her daughter oddly numb.

Genin Arc: Fei graduated with rather good scores – her habit of studying ahead helped on the final exams. She feels lost, though, now that the reason of her life – her mother – is gone.

Role-Play Sample: (I hadn't a clue of how I was going to do this, so I just relaxed and pretended I was writing for Fanfiction.net – it helped a lot, but still...)

Her knees were pointy and uncomfortable against her chest, so Fei hugged them tighter, burying her tear-stained face into her arms as she burned – boiling waves of heat spreading and fogging her mind up until all she could see were faraway, fleeting shapes swiftly moving beyond the haze. Where…?

Fei lifted her head up an inch, and the house where she’d lived all her life was so oddly unfamiliar she reached out to certify herself of– there, the couch, where she’d sat with a vague uneasiness because Mother was late – late, for what? What time is it? There’s no clock, no clock, there was a clock, but – but it didn’t matter because nothing had ever happened to Mother yet. And there, the red spots on her wrist where the ANBU – cat mask – had held her just a bit too hard, because he didn’t know how to handle children and she couldn’t go see mother, but she wanted to, and the flame inside her burned so brightly Fei unsteadily got to her feet.

The others had come back from the mission – tall man, two tall men, three, woman? – but they weren’t important, there was somebody else who was, and couldn’t they see that they weren’t? Fei wanted them to LEAVE, but cat-mask had held her– his fingers on her wrist, and she dug her own fingers into the vestiges of his – attacking him like he was there – until the blood trickled down her fingernails; relishing in the pain.

Suddenly she wanted to hurt, to drag her arm across shards of broken glass and laugh until she was out of breath and bleed until she was out of blood. Fei raced down the corridor, everything spinning, mother smiling, and nearly broke the bathroom’s doorknob as she stumbled and howled, only stopping when a pale face looked back at her on the mirror – then she lost strength and couldn’t stand anymore, because her legs were heavy and clinging to the sink couldn’t keep her from sinking.

Fei curled up on the bathroom’s floor, shaking with sobs, and a crimson stain formed where her heart had been.


(As I know my writings can be very confusing, I guess I'd better explain: Fei doesn't really die, she just presses her wounded arm to her chest and the blood spills - my english vocabulary is just way too poor to say what I want, ugh. The 'had' is completely metaphorical. And Kaori doesn't really smile at her - she's hallucinating.)

So, uh. My last text was too emotional and confusing. I want to give you an idea of how I write normal scenes, because I won't be RPGing about Fei having a mental breakdown all the time, right? Here's another one. I know it's too long and that it has too many paragraphs to really be RPG, but that's just the way I'm used to - hopefully I'll learn how to write in a more RPG-like manner someday.

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...I can't seem to stop writing dreadfully dramatic things, can I? Sorry.





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PostSubject: Re: Yamanaka, Fei [...Done] Thu 30 Sep 2010, 1:03 am

I'd have to disagree Baab, i think this will be an awesome character profile Wink Keep up the good work, i'm looking forward to seeing your immense rp skillz in action.

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PostSubject: Re: Yamanaka, Fei [...Done] Mon 04 Oct 2010, 12:27 am

Uh... it's done. Somebody move it to the completed apps so it can be rejected, please?

If by some miracle this is approved, I'm also looking forward seeing more of my so-called immense RPG skills. Perharps somebody can introduce me to them.

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PostSubject: Re: Yamanaka, Fei [...Done] Wed 06 Oct 2010, 2:36 am

Baab wrote:

Name: Razors
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Element: Wind
Description: Several thin blades of wind (about one meter tall each) are formed and controlled by the user. The user can make as many blades as he/she would like, but only ONE blade can be moved at a time - though they can be moved in quick succession, so it appears otherwise. Range of the attack: 1m-15m

I suggest setting a limit to the amount of blades that can be created at a time. Perhaps five or six at a time would be good. You can choose.




Baab wrote:
Name: Faint
Rank: C Difficulty: D
Type: Genjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: This technique makes its single target feel weak. It doesn't cause any pain - the victim just feels tired, as if he/she is about to faint. The illusion is easy to get rid of, but quite vivid.

I believe this genjutsu could actually pass as a D-ranked jutsu rather than a C ranked.




And I'm just curious, what do you mean by when you put the Rank of the genjutsu but then next to it you put Difficulty?


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PostSubject: Re: Yamanaka, Fei [...Done] Thu 07 Oct 2010, 10:45 pm

Done... But, instead of changing Razors I actually replaced it by a Danzo (oh, Danzo! <3) jutsu I couldn't find on Leafninja, y'know? I hope my impromptu description isn't too bad.

Anyway, difficulty is how hard it's to cancel the genjutsu, it seems. I actually took it from the Genjutsu Rules Topic o_o'... I guess nobody really reads that? Oh well, don't mind me, I have long been diagnosed as a hopelessly compulsive reader. (I even read the Terms of Agreement before I enter a forum.)

PS: I meant to get this done sooner, but I got caught up in school.
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PostSubject: Re: Yamanaka, Fei [...Done] Fri 08 Oct 2010, 1:42 am

Baab wrote:
Done... But, instead of changing Razors I actually replaced it by a Danzo (oh, Danzo! <3) jutsu I couldn't find on Leafninja, y'know? I hope my impromptu description isn't too bad.

The description is fine, I just need to know if it's as large as a normal kunai. If it is, please squeeze that into the description. Also, just to be clear, it is only one kunai that is spat out, right?

Baab wrote:
Anyway, difficulty is how hard it's to cancel the genjutsu, it seems. I actually took it from the Genjutsu Rules Topic o_o'... I guess nobody really reads that? Oh well, don't mind me, I have long been diagnosed as a hopelessly compulsive reader. (I even read the Terms of Agreement before I enter a forum.)

PS: I meant to get this done sooner, but I got caught up in school.

Oh, right! My mistake! I had completely forgotten about that, silly me. I believe you're genjutsu is just fine, then.

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PostSubject: Re: Yamanaka, Fei [...Done] Fri 08 Oct 2010, 2:03 am

Done. Yup, I guess it's only one kunai.
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PostSubject: Re: Yamanaka, Fei [...Done] Mon 11 Oct 2010, 12:38 am

Unless any other mod or admin see a problem here, you're Approved.
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PostSubject: Re: Yamanaka, Fei [...Done] Wed 24 Nov 2010, 7:52 am

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