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PostSubject: Hitonomi, Mikyako [Kumo Genin] Sun 13 May 2012, 9:30 pm



HITONOMI, MIYAKO

THE INFO.

Name: Hitonomi, Miyako
Nickname: Her nickname is Hane, meaning feather. Her mother started calling her that when she was young because she would always collect the feathers birds would drop and put them into her hair.
Age: 15
Gender: female
Appearance: Miyako spends most of her time out side walking in the mountains with Arashi flying smoothly besides her. Because of her extensive amount of time outside she’s developed a beautiful tan tone to her skin, which never seems to fade, even in the darkest of winters. Not only is her skin beautiful, but a body to go with it: toned and slender from her long walks and diet mainly of fruits and nuts. At 5’3” and 120 lbs she’s built for elegant speed.

Her face is nothing to scoff at; with piercing yellow eyes and raven hair she’s nothing short of striking. Though the three slashes across her right eye can be a bit of a distraction. She does her best to keep her scars and eyes hidden because of the ridicule she’s gotten for having such odd eyes and such an unappealing scar. She cuts her hair short and messy, with sloppy forward bangs and longer strands framing her face. She has entangled five feathers into her hair, five of her favorite feathers she’s found while exploring different nesting grounds. She has a white slender feather, a broad red feather, and a white and tan striped feather bunched together toward the back of her head on the right. She has a small black feather on the right side of her face, and a yellow feather behind her left ear. She has old hawk talons hanging from her ears and two more piercings in her right ear. On her left side to the middle of her stomach she has her clan’s crest tattooed in blue.

When Miyako is just being herself, either walking around with Arashi or getting lost in her meditation, she wears something comfortable and almost conservative. This is mostly due to the fact that Miyako is painfully aware that she has a very womanly figure with nice hips and an even nicer chest. Because she is very shy about her appearance she wears a simple semi-lose white tank with black lace trimmings and blue skinny jeans. She clicks a black belt with a worn buckle on top of her jeans and black lace-up combat boots on her feet. She always has her old worn out black jacket on, no matter how hot it is. See image above

Miyako’s mother always tried to get Miyako to be more comfortable with her body, so when it came time to get Miyako’s ninja gear, mom took total control. Miyako adorns black almost booty-shorts with a black belt with a silver buckle and a pouch on her left side for carrying wire, senbon and snacks for her and Arashi. Up top she has a black tube top that reaches down just above her stomach in the winter and fall, but in the summer and spring she’s forced to wear a black bikini top. She has knee high black boots on her feet and a black holster on her right thigh. Her mom thought that dressing her this way would allow Miyako to use her feminine wiles to through men off their guard. Though it is tradition within the Hitonomi clan for shinobi to wear cloaks of some sort. Miyako took full advantage of this and constantly wears her long black jacket that reaches just above her knees. The bottom is frayed and it has a silver zipper in front that, when zipped, closes the jacket just above her buckle. It’s long sleeves have a white stripe down the side, and they bunch up at her wrists where they meet the black gloves she wears. It had a large hood that Miyako pulls up when it’s raining or she feels like hiding. When she changes into her ninja gear she takes off the black string she ties around her neck and places her black forehead protector in it's place. She also has a habit of occasionally growing out her hair very long from time to time. When she does she keeps her bangs messy with pieces framing her face and she ties her hair back into two pigtails so they don't get in her way. See image below
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Forehead Protector: Worn around her neck.
Personality: Miyako is a girl of misconceptions since she’s often viewed as an unreliable slacker with no conviction or goals. This is mostly due to the fact that during class she’s staring out the window. That is if she remembers to go to class instead of going out with Arashi. She’s got quite the negative reputation. Miyako’s need for open air and freedom is the root of her flightiness. She craves it, almost like a drug. She hates being cooped up indoors, and her biggest fear is of being caged in or small dark spaces.

Miyako is generally a quiet girl, she doesn’t say much unless she has to. Since she spends so much time just by herself with only Arashi as company, some could say she’s become socially awkward. She doesn’t always understand why people want to “just talk”. She doesn’t exactly find it pointless, it’s just that no one’s ever really taken an interest in her before. She finds it strange when someone does. If romantically chased, she’d probably become frightened at the advances.

She has a deep appreciation for nature and for other creatures. She tries to meditate at least once a day to keep her mind as sharp as her eyes are. She’s actually quite brilliant since she learns more from her walks then she does in the classroom. She’s not pretentious about it, but she does tend to believe that what she learns out there is more applicable then what a book can teach her. Has a book ever been through a battle? No. So how could it teach her how to fight?

Underneath Miyako’s quiet and often shy outer layers, lies a fighter just itching to get out. If someone’s actually able to become precious to Miyako, she’ll fight to the death protecting him or her. She is vicious and as stubborn as hell is hot. She’ll fight tooth and nail to win. She hates how people often dismiss her because she’s “flighty”, so she tries to make up for it in her fighting. She’ll train day and night to master a technique or a learn a new skill. She’s shockingly determined once she sets her mind to something.

Clan: Hitonomi
Nindō: Think what you will, but I’m warning you: running away isn’t something I know how to do.

THE NINJA.

Origin: Kaminari no Kuni
Affiliation: Kumogakure
Rank: C
Specialties: Weaponry (Main: Exotic, Sub: Ranged), Taijutsu
Elemental Affinities: Fuuton, Raiton
Combat Style: With her extensive knowledge of terrain, Miyako is a master of long ranged hidden attacks. Using her knowledge, Miyako is able to hide herself amongst the terrain, then using her keen eyes she attacks the foe with senbon. All the while Arashi silently flies above, watching the opponent carefully so he can alert Miyako to any on coming attack or swoop down to defend her if she's in trouble. Miyako prefers close combat, where she can whip out her claws and attack the foe with full force, ripping and slashing with unrelenting force. Miyako will often bend over and aim for the foe's legs while Arashi swoops in and claws at their face. Miyako is fierce and unrelenting in combat. But she does not taunt or provoke any attack, she'd rather wait and see how frustrated she can make her opponent before they attack, hoping that they'll be blinded by their frustration and rage and make more mistakes that she can take advantage of. She's a calculating and vicious foe. Unfortunately since she has no knowledge of genjutsu and little experience with ninjutsu, she has some challenges over coming them in battle. Though she knows how to combat ninjutsu to a certain degree, genjutsu really trips her up. She relies on Arashi to snap her out of it, if he hasn't been caught in it too. Arashi and Miyako are masters of the Double Bullet technique, they only save it for dire circumstances. But the two have been hard at work on another justsu unique to them and their bond.
Special Characteristics:
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THE BACKGROUND.

History:

Pre-Academy Arc
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Academy Arc
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Breathe in. Breathe out. Breathe in. Breathe… The slow rhythmic rise and fall of her chest was therapeutic to Miyako. She was able to focus her mind on just one thing; her breathing. Her pulsed slowed and she fell deep into mediation. Her body began to feel light as if it was slowly floating off from the ground.

”Ooph!” Suddenly Miyako felt something land on her stomach. She was snapped from her meditative state back into reality. She sat up slightly and sighed.

”Oh Ara…” Miyako smiled at the bird perched on her stomach. ”You’re so silly sometimes.” She reached forward and patted the bird’s head. Miyako marveled at how vibrant the emerald feathers on his head and back looked, and how much his sapphire wings seemed to glow.

Arashi dropped a small pebble on Miyako’s chest.

”What’s this?” Miyako picked up the small pebble and turned it over in her fingers. It was white with blue spots. She smiled. ”You always bring me the most interesting things Ara.”. She slowly started to sit up as Arashi hopped off her stomach to the ground. ”This’ll look good with the rest Ara. Thank you.”. She patted Arashi’s head and stood up.

She looked off to the west. The trees were being to turn orange in the fading light. She breathed in deeply, catching her last breath of peace. ”Let’s go home Ara. It’s getting dark.” Miyako turned her back to the setting sun and started heading home. Arashi smoothly jumped from the ground to his place on Miyako’s shoulder.

THE ARSENAL.


Kits
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Exotic Weapons
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Weaponry
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Academy Jutsu
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Kumogakure Jutsu
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Clan Jutsu
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Taijutsu
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FAMILIAR.

Name: Arashi
Nickname: Ara
Age: 15
Species: Swallow
Appearance: In the shade, Arashi appears to have black on top with a white underbelly. But once sunlight hits him, the black turns to a glistening emerald with sapphire wings. Being young for his breed, he's about half the size of a hawk at 25 oz, 13" tall and a wingspan of 26".
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Personality: Often seen as aloof and non-attentative, Arashi is actually highly preceptive as he is always looking around surveying his surroundings. Even though him and Miyako got off to a rough start, he is highly protective of her. He's been known to slash at anyone who even slightly upsets her. He tends to not like other creatures quickly if ever. He's always close to Miyako if he isn't perched on her shoulder. Only slightly smaller then a hawk, he is on the dwarf side for his age. But as Miyako grows so does he. He enjoys his long walks with Miyako because that is when he feels it's safe enough to leave her just for a moment so he can fly high and soar on the air streams. Always keeping a keen eye on Miyako though. He could be thought of as Miyako's protective older brother who isn't afraid to show how tough he is to protect his little sister. He's highly affectionate towards Miyako though, letting her pet him and often bringing her back interesting items he finds when he's flying above her. Arashi loves to fight and isn't afraid to show his strength, especially when Miyako is involved.

FACE CLAIM.

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Character Claim: Miyako (I manipulated the original image given in the URL)
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Image URL:http://www.otakuzone.com/club/12274/discussion/5165120/index.htm

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Character Claim: Black Rock Shooter
Source: Black Rock Shooter
Image URL:http://asuka111.deviantart.com/art/Black-Rock-Shooter-153448903


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PostSubject: Re: Hitonomi, Mikyako [Kumo Genin] Tue 15 May 2012, 3:37 am

Flesh out your academy arc a little bit. While they're training to become killing machines, they're still little kids and anything abnormal is generally responded to with criticism and scorn. A girl coming to class with a bird on her shoulder would certainly qualify as abnormal. This might feed in to why she's quiet and reserved. Histories in general are what shape a person's personality. There's a lot you can do here to flesh out your character that you're passing up on.

Mechanically it's fine as far as I can tell, so just shore up on this for me and you're good. If you want further examples for fleshing it out, feel free to ask.
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PostSubject: Re: Hitonomi, Mikyako [Kumo Genin] Mon 21 May 2012, 2:43 am

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PostSubject: Re: Hitonomi, Mikyako [Kumo Genin] Mon 21 May 2012, 3:53 am

    • Your Origin should be a country, and not a village. In your case, it would be Kaminari no Kuni.
    • Small nitpick; your specialties are missing a closing parenthesis.
    • Please expand your combat style some more. Speak about your relationship with your familiar, and when your character chooses to use Taijutsu, Weaponry (or even both), and what ranges she'll prefer to fight in. Though you do make it clear of her general tactics, the only mention of range is when she is using her claws; yet you clearly have ranged weaponry described in your specialty. Here's an excerpt from the Creation Guide if you need further help:
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      How does your character like to fight? Hit and run tactics, a fearless tank on the battlefield or do you lurk in the shadows and kill silently. There are many different tactics and here is where you can write a brief description of the combat style in which encapsulates your character. This in some regards can be seen as a characters 'Combat Nindō'. Include such things as your strengths/weaknesses, the range in which your character likes to fight, any martial or other styles they have learn't, and your 'trump card' or otherwise known as 'Signature Jutsu'.
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      Kumogakure no Jutsu - Hidden Cloud Technique
      This is a Ninjutsu (although for some reason it's not stated in your version), and since you don't have the Ninjutsu specialty, you may not use this technique. Once Chuunin, you are allowed to apply for up to 8 additional ninjutsu/genjutsu of D-rank; and once S-rank you can apply for C-rank ninjutsu/genjutsu. For now, you cannot have even D-rank Ninjutsu.
    • Quote :
      Rakurai - Lightning Strike
      This technique requires both Ninjutsu and Taijutsu; one of which you don't have access to.
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      Shōgeki - Tekina Shinjitsu - Shocking Truth
      Again, this is Ninjutsu.
    • Quote :
      Gōmon no Muchi - Lightning Whip
      Same as above.
    • Quote :
      Raitoningu no Kenshutsu - Lightning Detection
      Same as above.
    • Your familiar should have a much more in depth appearance. Though you have a picture, one cannot associate the size of the creature based on said image. Please place specific dimensions (weight, height, wingspan, width, etc.), and any other specifics on the bird. Such as the talons' length; and the size of the beak.
    • Your face claim is filled out incorrectly. The first field should be the name of the character from which the face claim is derived. Since it is your own picture, it can be your own character's name. The second field is from whom you attained this image. Since it's yourself, you may leave it as it is. The final field should be the URL of the image, which you haven't posted. Please fill the first and last field out appropriately.

That is all for now.


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PostSubject: Re: Hitonomi, Mikyako [Kumo Genin] Mon 21 May 2012, 5:29 am

Edited ^^
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PostSubject: Re: Hitonomi, Mikyako [Kumo Genin] Mon 21 May 2012, 5:48 pm

You still have not modified your combat style further. It's the same as before.

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Being young for his breed, he's about half the size of a hawk at 25 oz, 13' tall and a wingspan of 21 inches.
I believe you mean 13", not 13'. 13' = 13ft. Either way, the general rule of thumb is that the wingspan is double that of the body, but I'm not that smart about birds, so I guess you could keep it as it is? Wings just seem a bit small.

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PostSubject: Re: Hitonomi, Mikyako [Kumo Genin] Mon 21 May 2012, 8:30 pm

oops sorry i missed that! and I just looked up the average stats for a hawk and divided it by two. But I've made the edit to double the size.

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PostSubject: Re: Hitonomi, Mikyako [Kumo Genin] Mon 21 May 2012, 8:33 pm

Very well done.

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PostSubject: Re: Hitonomi, Mikyako [Kumo Genin] Mon 21 May 2012, 8:54 pm

Thank you Enzo ^^
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PostSubject: Re: Hitonomi, Mikyako [Kumo Genin] Mon 21 May 2012, 9:07 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Hitonomi, Mikyako [Kumo Genin] Tue 14 Aug 2012, 3:02 pm


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