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PostSubject: Kemuri Haretsu, Konoha Genin Sun 26 Aug 2012, 4:03 pm



HARETSU, KEMURI.

THE INFO.

Name: Kemuri Haretsu
Nickname: The Terrorist of Konoha
Age: 15
Gender: Female
Appearance:
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Forehead Protector: Kemuri honestly prefers not to wear her headband, keeping it around her waist as a belt with the protector plate on her lower back. She keeps this belt hidden underneath her shirt. Risky, but efficient for how she prefers to operate.
Personality:
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Clan: Haretsu
Nindō: “Yeah? Yeah.”

THE NINJA.

Origin: Born in Amegakure no Sato
Affiliation: Konohagakure
Rank: Genin
Specialties: Ninjutsu (Primary), Taijutsu (Secondary)
Elemental Affinities: Doton (Earth, Primary), Katon (Fire, Secondary)
Combat Style:
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Special Characteristics:
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THE BACKGROUND.

History:
Birth with a Bang
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Abandoned
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Common Day
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Roleplay Sample:

The crickets kept chirping, annoying bugs hidden in the night not unlike Kemuri was hidden at the moment. Her breathing was shallow, her eyes closed as she listened to the wind and waited for the sound that she knew would be coming. Above her was a cloak of leafs that shrouded her and kept her from the prying eyes of those who passed on the road only a few dozen feet from her positioning. The crickets kept chirping and it was a struggle not to lash out and slap at the darkness to hopefully shut them up for a time and give the Haretsu genin some peace and quiet if only for a few moments. This assignment was getting annoying, but it was far from Kemuri’s place to complain after she had specifically requested this.

This mission reminded her of the good days when she played the wounded girl in the road to get a market caravan to stop while an ambush by her family was sprung to obliterate them. Those days when she sat with wolfs blood on her leg and spring water about her face to make it look as if she was crying. Now she spent her days following orders, trying to work with a team, and living in a village instead of on the road towards her next score.

A cracking twig on the road caught her attention, her focus returning to the plan as she waited for the next one. Another crack echoed in the woods, and another and another as the wagon wheel followed the path set out by the girl. They thought the cracking was just a hazard of the road and by now the caravan guards would be on high alert for potential ambushers attracted to the sound and waiting for the attack to land. Kemuri counted down the seconds, imagining their eyes scanning the woodlands and waiting for a kunai or an explosive tag, or a shinobi charging in to attack them.

Sixteen steps.

She counted, waiting until the cracking of twigs stopped and she knew that they had arrived. Beneath her shroud of leaves did her hand come up in the signal. It was a motion not missed by the caravan guards, who saw the shift in leaves and immediately sprung into action but far too late. As their cry of alarm went up the boom of an explosion and the rush of air that blew off the leaves covering her consumed them entirely. Part of the path had been repaved, and when the first wagon had reached the end of it was when Kemuri had detonated the path of clay. Few would have survived, none of them uninjured. She put a hand to her ear, clicking the headset there.

“Target landed, several wounded. Mission accomplished, yeah? Yeah.”

FACE CLAIM.

Character Claim: Rikku Al-Bhet
Source: Deviant Art, Artgerm
Image URL: https://s.deviantart.com/th/images3/i/2004/161/d/a/Rikku.jpg


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PostSubject: Re: Kemuri Haretsu, Konoha Genin Sun 26 Aug 2012, 7:55 pm

Arsenal

Academy Techniques
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Doton Techniques

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Non-Elemental Techniques
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Katon Techniques
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Clay Techniques
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Gear
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Taijutsu
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PostSubject: Re: Kemuri Haretsu, Konoha Genin Thu 30 Aug 2012, 10:48 pm

Been four days, might as well.
    Fuuinjutsu: Instant Transfer wrote:
    Name: Instant Transfer
    Rank: C
    Type: Fuuinjutsu
    Range: Touch
    Element: None
    Description: This technique allows the instant transfer of a seal from one surface to another so long as the entire seal is touched to that surface and is made of a transferable material (Blood, Ink, Urine, etc). If perfect contact is not made, the seal cannot transfer. This technique is useful for quietly disarming exploding tags without letting your enemy know their trap has been made useless, or removing a binding seal from an ally onto a scroll. No shinobi can transfer a seal above their own rank.
    Chakra Cost: 7
    To me, this suggests that you can remove any seal, if you're an S rank. So, by using a C rank Jutsu, an S rank Shinobi could remove a S rank seal? If you want to be able to remove higher ranking seals, implement a rank variant of the jutsu, i.e., a B rank version for B rank seals, A rank version for A rank seals, etc.

    Fuuinjutsu: The 31 Seals: Mirror Seal wrote:
    Name: The 31 Seals: Mirror Seal
    Rank: C-S
    Type: Fuuinjutsu
    Range: Touch (The jutsu must touch the seal)
    Element: N/A
    Description: This fuuinjutsu creates a seal that is capable of absorbing incoming hostile attacks and seal them away effortlessly to totally nullify their affects and store it until a later time. This seal is far from perfect however, only able to keep a jutsu stored for a maximum of 1 topic (Must be the same Topic). Also, no shinobi can use the seal to absorb a technique higher than their own rank. Of course when the seal is full and unsealed it unleashes the jutsu as originally sealed and in the opposite direction of the seal.
    Chakra Cost: 2+Cost of Jutsu to Seal, 2CP to unseal
    Alright, I'm not huge on this jutsu myself, but after discussing it with Uros, and the fact it was approved by both him and Jerry in the past, I'm green lighting it. However, please modify the chakra cost back to its original state, so that it requires the chakra cost of the jutsu it absorbed to be utilised again. Also, please specify that it requires direct, head on contact with the jutsu in question in order to absorb it (not just pull it out of thin air). On top of that, please specify what type of jutsu/attacks it can absorb; i.e., is it just physical attacks, or attacks composed of Chakra, etc.

    'Harold' And 'Rebecca' hardly seem like names you would find in the Narutoverse. Please adapt them to something more Japanese.

    Please edit your origin to simply 'Amegakure no Sato'. 'Born in' is not required.

Thank you for co-operating, good work overall.

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PostSubject: Re: Kemuri Haretsu, Konoha Genin Fri 31 Aug 2012, 1:53 am

Oh my bad; I didn't notice the Application was finished.

With the exception of the issues Miguel highlighted, I can find no other faults. I'm loving the history and the personality of your character, and tbh, can't wait to see her in action. GREAT Work.

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PostSubject: Re: Kemuri Haretsu, Konoha Genin Fri 31 Aug 2012, 4:11 am

Origin should be a country. Just saiyan.
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PostSubject: Re: Kemuri Haretsu, Konoha Genin Fri 31 Aug 2012, 6:55 am

Shush Enzo, it's a city. As a southerner I put my city before my state and my state before my country!

As towards my jutsu cost being changed, if I re-add to include the jutsu cost then it'll be ridiculously overpriced. I'll also point out that a storage jutsu from the academy list specifically states that it can seal jutsu. So if my 31 Seals technique is not approvable then I'll replace it. And I'll use the academy jutsu to pay 2CP, seal it. 2cp, unseal it. At least until staff fixes it.
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PostSubject: Re: Kemuri Haretsu, Konoha Genin Fri 31 Aug 2012, 6:02 pm

Hey hey hey, I MADE EDITSS
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PostSubject: Re: Kemuri Haretsu, Konoha Genin Fri 31 Aug 2012, 6:15 pm

    Thanks for co-operating and making the required edits.


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PostSubject: Re: Kemuri Haretsu, Konoha Genin Sun 16 Dec 2012, 1:14 pm


Archived.
Due to character death.

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