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PostSubject: Littner, Kamina [Hokage] Tue 30 Mar 2010, 3:44 am

Basic
Information:

    Name:
    Kamina Littner
    Secondary Title:
    Bro
    Age:
    23
    Gender:
    Male
    Physical Appearance:

    .:Younger:.
    .:Older/Now:.

    .:Older/Now:.



    Kamina stands at almost exactly 6 feet 4 inches tall, a bit taller than most ninja. His body is incredibly muscular, with well tonedand large muscles popping out in most places. He has a very long torso, and a large solid chest. Across his chest and arms, Kamina has many trible tattoos, though they’re all connected as one piece. On his arms, he also wears bandages around his wrists and forearm area. His Biceps bulge beneath his usually discarded red cloak, which is decorated with the insignia of a do-gooding gang of children that he led during his younger years. This cloak reaches the bottom of his calfs, and is torn, as he actually got the cloak upon discovering the body of his dead father, the insignia already inscribed, he chose to use it for the gang. The cloak connects over his chest by two gold chains that string from side to side.

    Kamina’s face has balanced features overall, with large red eyes, that always appear either kind and caring, or intense and arrogant. His nose is more or less average though a bit pointer then most, admittedly. His jaw bone protrudes at an angle, giving it a fierce, intimidating appearance. Overtop his eyes, he wears strange, red sunglasses, with just out in angles far past his head, giving them an uncomfortable appearance. Kamina has short, spiky blue hair which sometimes covers up a small part of his red sunglasses.

    Bandages are wrapped around Kamina’s lower torso. He wears very loosely fitting black pants that drape down to his ankles. Beneath them are toned and extremely muscular legs. To keep his loose black pants from falling down he wears a simple white belt that has many black circles in a constant pattern. He wears nothing on his feet, and instead prefers to go barefoot, although there is white bandage around his ankle that goes down beneath his heel.

    Personality:
    Kamina’s most notable character trait is his surface arrogance and frankly big headedness. In most situations, that don’t require serious thought or care, he’s rather loud and takes little care in what he says. He walks with his head held high, as if he was the best thing since sliced bread. Though he doesn’t believe that, he regards highly in the ability of his comrades, and doesn’t actually openly regard himself as godly by any means. Furthermore, he cares more about his people and their protection than anything else, and he firmly believes that his and Konoha’s job to achieve greatness in the world.

    As an accent to his arrogance, he flaunts very intimidating and snobby poses, as well as making use of eccentric, and almost insane hand gestures. It’s not unheard of for him to jump down from the academy’s roof and kick the snot out of one of the training students, and deliver to them a speech about striving for excellence. Though it seems quite insane, these people always benefit from it in the end, and he never hurts them too badly.

    Beneath his arrogance is a smart and caring side, though he saves those for situations of solitude, or for those he holds great trust with. He uses this side of him to make major decisions for konoha, but usually announces such decisions with his usual arrogance and loudness. He has no real desire for women, and is actually quite asexual, or so he believes. It will actually end up being simple lack of caring for that part of his body and mind, and that in fact if the right girl were to show up, he would have all of those feelings and make a loving partner for any woman who he fell in love with, and loved him in return

    In Battle, Kamina is courageous or stupid really, but he likes to call it the first. He uses brute force in battle, and relies on luck and speed to adapt to situations than he does on careful tactical planning. He uses physical attacks a lot, though when he does resort to Ninjutsu, it’s a terror to behold. He loves toying with his opponents more than anything, and does his best to make them very angry, and exploits their anger to his advantage, as he sees it as a weakness.

    Catch Phrase:

    Usually:

    "Listen up. Don't believe in yourself. Believe in
    me! Believe in me, who believes in you!"


    Occasionaly:

    "Don't forget.
    Believe in yourself! Not you, who i believe in. Not me, who believes in you.
    Believe in you.. who believes in himself!"


    "Go beyond the
    impossible and kick reason to the curb!”


    “If there is a
    wall, just smash it. If there is no path, just make it with your hand!”


    “Who the hell do
    you think I am?”


    Attacks(Note these are just normal punches/kicks):

    "'Who Do You
    Think I Am' Kick!!!!"


    "'How Dare You
    Do That To My Precious Underling' Punch!!!!"


    "'This Is The
    Real Spirit Of Men' Attack!!!!"


    “Get out of my way
    stab!!!”


    “Clench your teeth!”
    (Right before a punch to the face)



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PostSubject: Re: Littner, Kamina [Hokage] Tue 30 Mar 2010, 4:45 am

History


.:Parents:.
Kamina knows absolutely nothing about his parents, and this is entirely for the better. His parents were complete low lifes, doing nothing with themselves, and not contributing to society. Despite having potential, and a bloodline ability, they didn't become ninja, and opted for a life of laziness. When they had Kamina, they did a pretty piss poor job of taking care of him as a baby, and one day, on a very rare trip outside their house, they were attacked by a group of Bandits. These bandits killed both of Kamina's parents, and stole him at the young age of 6 months, where they would raise him alongside other children to be bandits and workers.

.:Childhood:.
As a child, Kamina was given just necessary food, and horrible treatment. There were barely enough people to watch the kids or even give a damn about them, as it was the older children that recieved all the recognition, as they were being trained to become bandits. The babies were rarely cleaned regularly, and were often given spoiled food. Many children died before seeing the age of 3, and several more after that. There was never any play time, babies and small children just sat in their poorly constructed cribs or their beds for most of the day, having very little room to move around or get exercise. Given the conditions in which he was raised, it seem entirely illogical that he would turn out to be the person he became.

At the age of 5, Kamina begain getting the training of a bandit, doing harsh physical work outs, and training with swords and other weaponry. It wouldn't be till the age of 9, when he entered the academy, that he would train his chakra, and this contributed to his poor chakra control throughout life. He showed great skill in physical aspects during his training, and became great with a sword as he trained, easily outranking everyone else there. He trained with determination, knowing it was the only way to survive. But Kamina knew what was up. He knew that he was being held captive, as where the others, and he didn't like it, he didn't like it one bit. He began to talk to the other kids there, and got several to join with him in a group that plotted their captors' demise.

Kamina trained forever hard, and he met with his group of rebellers every week, and they made plans to eventually end their captors' rule. They grew stronger and stronger, and at the age of 9, it was time for Kamina to strike. With his rag-tad group of half trained bandits, he overtook the lead bandits, and killed them, with the help of the friends he made. He faced the leader of them all as his final challenge, and beat him, leaving him maimed and wounded, and stealing the sword that he stole from Kamina's parents as his final act of revenge against the bandits. Kamina, unlike the others who wanted to reform the bandit camp and turn it into their own, left, heading for konoha, where he wished to become a ninja.

.:Academy Arc:.
Kamina came back to Konoha bloody and tired, and collapsed in front of the gates. With bloodwork done, he was determined to be a member of a Konoha Family, and thusly was placed in the Ninja Academy at the age of 9. Kamina had great skill in weaponry and physical combat; However, he had very poor skill in Ninjutsu, in fact, he had none at all. He trained day and night in an effort to catch up on the kids whom had the opportunity to train their chakra control with their parents in the early parts of their childhood. He trained very hard, but still had poor chakra control, and even with his clan’s boost in chakra, he effectively only had 150% chakra. Kamina would end up failing the graduation exam 3 times before finally passing.

At home, Kamina had time for nothing but concentrating on his training. He couldn’t face the truly prominent fact that he was absolutely alone outside the Academy, with no family or friends. He was the last of his already barely known clan, and had nobody to learn from. He was alone in a world where being alone could be your greatest asset and most powerful tool, but Kamina would’ve given it up immediately, if he could. In the Academy, Kamina was the class clown, but more than that. He stood up for those who couldn’t stand up for themselves, and defended the defenseless. He didn’t stand for bullying and the like, and made it his job to punish those who picked on others lesser then themselves. Because of this, he made friends with those who had similar views as he, as well as those he defended. At the age of 12, Kamina became a Genin.

.:Genin Arc:.
Passing the exam, Kamina was paired into a Genin team consisting of people very different from him. His sensei was much more passive and laid back then Kamina would’ve preferred. One of his teammates was an arrogant fool, much like Kamina, and this created some issues with getting along as a team. Their training began immediately, and Kamina’s leadership skills were natural. Despite his team’s differences, they functioned incredibly effectively as a team.

On missions, they were efficient task completing machines, easily plowing through the E and D rank missions that their Hokage would send them on, and taking on the more challenging C rank missions after just half a year of training and mission completions. They continued to train vigorously, Kamina increasing his chakra control as he did so, though he was still far below average. Despite his and his team members’ pleading and desires, his sensei refused to let them take the chuunin exam that year. In fact, it wouldn’t be until Kamina was 15 that he and his team would take the chuunin exams.

When the time came for the exams, Team 9 (Kamina’s team) was a group of seasoned ninjas, and they were all extremely grateful for their sensei’s holding them back. The chuunin exams were difficult, even for Kamina and his teammates, who excelled above most. But like all challenges they would face, they would break them down with their own hands, and when no clear path existed, they would form one with their own hands.

.:Chuunin Arc:.
Becoming a Chuunin at the age of 15, Kamina continued his training, and was placed on a team with one of his former teammates, a man that, throughout their Genin years, he had become the best of friends with. They trained together, and ate together, when they got the money, they even lived in an apartment together. They were entirely inseparable, but their relationship’s critical flaw would be revealed in time.As a Chuunin, he learned of his second element, lightning, during his training, after taking the standard paper test. He continued to train Ninjutsu during his time as a Chuunin, and further developed his chakra control, though it was even still below average, with his own naturally large chakra bank, and his clan’s he has an effectively high chakra bank, even with his poor control. He created his Art of Fire technique during this time, as well as learning a ton of lightning jutsu. At this time, he knew over 50 techniques.

As a Chuunin, he also took many opportunities to train, and aid in the training of genin and academy students. He found he loved sharing his knowledge, and though he was a hard trainer, he got work done, and made students excel. He continued to do this through his Chuunin years and into his Jounin years, as well as proctoring exams and occasionally substituting at the Ninja Academy (Like, filling in for a teacher when they were sick, not explaining the substitution technique xP). When Kamina was 17, he and his friend were enlisted for a special opportunity, to take an A rank mission, because Jounin were short. Kamina knew what this was, it was a Jounin Examination in disguise, and only one of the two would pass. The mission involved the assassination of the Leader of the then rampant Tea Country, as well as the destruction of the administration building. Though Kamina and his mission partner succeeded in the mission, Kamina ended up carrying his friend back unconscious over his back, because of injuries he faced.

This resulted in Kamina receiving the promotion to Jounin by selection of the Hokage. Kamina visited his friend every day in the hospital, but he seemed distant, vacant. One day, when Kamina was walking down the street to his apartment he felt a difference in the breeze, and ducked instinctively, only to find a blade whirring above his head. He spun and aimed a well-placed kick to his assailant’s sternum. He saw his friend fly back, hitting the wall of a building. Kamina stood up shaking, unable to believe that the only friend he had ever had. He stared with a mix of anger and sadness, as a single tear rolled down his face. His friend looked back with hatred in his eyes, and he raised his blade again, before charging and striking. Without thinking, Kamina drew his sword and parried the attack. Unable to speak, Kamina sobbed as he countered his friend’s attacks, going through the motions of battle without actually thinking about what he was doing. Eventually, Kamina bested his friend, and stabbed him in the gut. His friend dropped his sword, and Kamina hoped to see a glint of recognition in his eyes as he fell to the ground, but saw nothing but pure hatred as he drew his dying breath. Kamina picked up the sword and removed the sheath from his friend, and put it around his back, claiming it as a reminder to life. He carried the dead body to the morgue, his body getting covered in the blood of his dying friend. The stains on his clothing were a mix between the blood of his friend and the tears about him.

.:Jounin Arc:.
As big of an impact that his friend’s death had on him, Kamina continued on, living by his own mottos to press forward. He eventually go over the depression that had ensued by concentrating on increasing his prowess as a ninja. He trained and trained, and at this time knew almost 100 jutsu. He participated in many dangerous missions, either with other Jounin or by his lonesome. The most notable of these was the assassination of a League of A rank missing ninja by him and 3 other Jounin.

He received a team at this time and continued proctoring exams and training others. He had many more duties as a Jounin, and because of this was often late to his training courses with his Genin. He and his Genin team excelled, and quickly became the top team. He was confident in his team, and gave them the opportunity to take the first Chuunin exam that was available. They agreed and passed it with flying colors, under the amazing training of their sensei. As Konoha’s Hokage reached an old age, it was time for a new Hokage to be considered. Kamina was the prime candidate, and was chosen to be his successor by unanimous decision. He became Hokage at the age of 20

.:Kage Arc:.
Becoming Hokage was possibly the best thing to happen to Kamina. He quickly rose to popularity, and enacted many new policies that bettered Konoha as a whole. He did everything for his village, and was an active Hokage, participating in village activities whenever possible, when he wasn’t busy. Konoha entered a golden era, and continues to develop as one of the big four nations.


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PostSubject: Re: Littner, Kamina [Hokage] Tue 30 Mar 2010, 4:45 am

Rank Information:

    Rank: Hokage
    Village Affiliation:
    Konohagakure no Sato.


Special Information:

    Character Speciality:
    Main: Ninjutsu
    Sub: Weaponry (Kenjutsu, Misc)
    Elemental Affinity:
    Main: Fire
    Sub: Lightning
    Special Characteristics:
    Physical Strength- As a Master of Kenjutsu, Kamina did strength training throughout his life, and as such has achieved massive muscles. As he always relied more on strength then on tactics. Because of this, Kamina has 15% greater physical strength then the average ninja of his rank.

    Chakra Reserves- Kamina has, on top of his clan’s chakra increase, a 50% increase in chakra. However, he has much poorer chakra control than most in his clan.

    It's difficult to explain it in terms of loss, so it's easier to say how much of an increase it effectively is, as if he lacks any sort of poor chakra control. Which is 150%. This chakra control results, not in an inability to perform more difficult techniques, but rather in an inability to efficiently use chakra.



Weaponry:
Name: Riptide
Quantity: 1
Rank: S
Appearance:

A simple looking, long katana. It’s sheath is redish brown with gold accents. It’s hilt a simple black with white diamond patern. It’s longer than a standard length katana.

Special Abilities/Characteristics:
The Ten Ton Rusty Sword- If anyone other than Kamina were to attempt to pick up this sword, it would feel as if it weighed ten tons, making them unable to wield it. Additionally, as they try to wield it, it will be rusty, and lose its edge immediately. If they do manage to wield it, when they attack, though it will feel like a ton to them, it will feel like being hit with plastic to whomever is on the receiving end. This ability is due to a small fuuinjutsu placed on the bottom of the blade. It's actually a sealing technique, though a very advanced one. When a non clanmember touches holds the blade, the seal takes a very small amount of chakra, and, reading it as non clan-member chakra, instantly unseals the current, regular blade, and releases the ten ton rusty sword. If a clan member was holding it, and someone else grabs the base, it will stay in it's regular form.

Light as a Feather- To Kamina, this sword has the perfect weight and is entirely balanced. It is like this for any rightful owner of the sword. Any Littner Family Member whom is the current owner of the blade will find that it is perfectly balanced in their hands, and is whatever weight that will make them most efficient in battle. Additionally, each member of the clan has access to 3 abilities within the blade. 1, The Forger’s Blade Ability, which all clan members have, and 2 that are specific to the User. This applies whether or not he's wielding the blade in a one handed or two handed fashion. It will feel perfectly balanced for whatever style he chooses. This too is due to a fuuinjutsu that reads chakra, and alters it's feel based on how a user uses it, and how successfully.

Profession’s Blades Abilities
Only one of these abilities can be used per 5 posts, even if one is ended early. It costs an A rank amount of chakra to activate any of these abilities.

The Forger’s Blade Ability- This Ability Corresponds with his Clan’s “Hot-Blooded” ability. However, he does not have to activate his KKG to activate this ability. When activated, the blade heats up to about 100 degrees, and can cut through flesh and bone like butter. Clan Members usually don’t use this ability for more than a post, as they get the equivalent of a bad sunburn after 1 post of use. Using it two posts they experience severe burns on their hands. Using it for three posts they lose their ability to use their hand(s), and have to get immediate treatment. If they manage to use it for 4 posts, they lose the use of their hands forever.

The Assassin’s Blade Ability
When activated, the blade pulsates with electrical energy. When Striking an opponent, the blade causes electrical damage that nums the arm by sending a quick, continuous amount of voltage into them. The voltage isn’t high enough to cause great damage, but because there is a lot and is very quick, it will cut off the ability to use whatever limb is struck for 2 posts. Because this attack isn’t all that powerful, it has no real downfall, unless it’s used for more than three consecutive posts, in which case the user loses the ability to move their arm(s) for 2 posts. The Reason it’s called the Assassin’s Blade Ability is because if the user strike a target where the spine meets the head, the continual volts of electricity kills instantly. Of course, this is such a hard feat to accomplish, it’s hardly worth mentioning. Any of these can be countered by someone anticipating an electrical attack, using raiton chakra to negate it, or sufficient medical techniques to reverse it. It does require bare skin for the special ability to work, however, this is a non issue unless the opponent wears armour, as the sword will cut right through.

The Boxer’s Blade Ability
When Activated, the blade’s size increases monumentally, but the clan member's ability to hold it and swing it effectively does not. With this size increase, it takes a new shape, resembling a buster sword rather than a long katana. This new buster sword looks like this-

It is 8 feet long, and about 3/4 of a foot wide, being about 2 inches thick.
With this new ability, the sword will do tremendous pressure damage for up to 5 posts. When he hits something with his sword, it will most likely break. Hitting the ground would create a massive crater, and exchanging blows with another sword would end up in the Enemy’s blade shattering and the blade breaking right through. Getting a limb hit with this sword will instantly shatter bones, and a direct hit to the heart or torso would result in almost imminent death. Unlike his other swords, this one has a negative effect for every successful hit. He experiences muscle bruising, and if he does more than 4 hits with this sword his hand will shatter. At 3 hits he’ll have extreme muscle bruising, and any less than that he’ll have muscle bruising and intense pain. At 3 hits or more he loses the use of his hands. These pressure hits can be blocked by an equally strong S rank defense or attack of similar nature.

Name: Lightning Tanto
Quantity:2
Rank: B
Appearance: In appearance, they are average sized tanto, their blade’s being a foot and a half long, the hilt being a half a foot long, with no hilt guard. The hilt is a simple wooden design, with the kanji for lightning written on either side in bold yellow lettering, which stands out against the dark wood. The sheath is also made out of wood. The blade itself is, in appearance, the same as any other blade, shiny steel. At the base of the blade, is the Kanji for Lightning again, this time engraved into it. Kamina wears these two blades sheathed, attached to his belt, they hang behind him.
Special Abilities/Characteristics: By expending a C rank amount of chakra, the user will fill the blade with Lightning Chakra, giving it’s a paralyzing effect when it cuts or makes contact with the opponent. This is why the hilt is made of wood, to prevent the user from be shocked. This ability lasts for 3 posts.
Origin: Kamina had this blade custom made as a jounin, and had the Blacksmith produce what Kamina had designed.

Name: Hidden blades
Quantity: 7
Rank: D
Appearance: Each blade is exactly 5 inches long, with a small hilt just an inch and a half long. They are made of simple steel. These blades are light, and deadly, being razor sharp, and designed for throwing, or striking by holding between two fingers. Kamina has 2 of these hidden in tiny, unnoticeable compartments on each leg, has 1 hidden behind each shoulder, and 1 hidden in his hair, well concealed as it is up against his scalp.
Special Abilities/Characteristics: N/A
Origin: Kamina purchased these blades from a merchant in Tea Country

Name: Explosion of Perversion
Quantity: 1
Rank: A
Appearance: Appearing as a simple version of “Makeout Paradise” This is actually a book with every page filled with explosive tags. This makes for a great tactic in battle, as he can appear to be underestimating his opponent by reading, then throw this book at them and cause a giant explosion.
Special Abilities/Characteristics: It explodes, as it’s a variation of the exploding tag
Origin: This was one of Kamina’s brilliant ideas, and he spent about 2 hours first ripping the pages out of a sexy novel, and then replaced the pages with perfectly fitting explosive tags.

Name: Kage Katana (Shadow Blade)
Quantity: 2
Rank: B
Appearance: An all black katana, with the edge of the blade a clean white. It lacks a traditional hilt, and instead has an all black steel grip. There is a small hilt guard, which juts out at a point about 2 inches from the blade.
Special Abilities/Characteristics: The reason for being ranked B is because it is sealed in Kamina’s Arms (the blue tattoos on either arm), and is unsealed by channeling chakra into the Tattoos. Other than that, they have no special abilities. It takes a C rank amount of chakra to unseal them, and a D rank amount to reseal them, which is done by channeling chakra back into them instead of the tattoo.
Origin: These are the Katanas that Kamina won when he killed his friend, whom had attempted to kill him. He had them sealed in his tattoos, so that he would never forget the betrayal his friend showed him.

Name: Assassins….feet
Quantity: 2, one on each foot.
Rank: D
Appearance: Simple blades, attached to the bottom of his shoes, with a layer of rubber beneath them. When Kamina channels an E rank amount of chakra, the blades jut out seven inches from the tip of his shoe. Another E rank amount of chakra will make them retract
Special Abilities/Characteristics: N/A
Origin: Another purchase made from the Merchant in Tea Country



Summoning Contract

The following facts will be used in using this Summon- http://www.worldofhummingbirds.com/facts.php

Name: Kajiyoku ("Fire Will", but effectively "Will of Fire"
Rank: S
Appearance:
((Appearance informations as far as length and weight and wingspan goes it actual information, I multiplied the norm by 1000.))
Kajiyoku, while just slightly large when Kamina found her, has grown monumentally, to a length of 85 meters, or about 280 feet. Because of it's structure of bones and muscle, as well as only having 5% body fat, she only ways 45 pounds. Kajiyoku's wingspan is 333 feet. Kajiyoku is a beautiful seagreen, with dark blue wings with black accents. Her beak is black as well as her eyes, which are relatively small, compared to the rest of her body.
Contract Type: Blood Donation
Species: Hummingbird
Elemental Affinity: Wind
Special Abilities/Characteristics:
Doesn't need handseals to use jutsu, instead must wait just a few seconds to build up chakra.

Since she cannot talk, she instead has the ability to telepathically communicate with it's summoner

Obviously, being a bird, she can fly.
Background:
Kamina discovered this bird entirely by accident, on a mission during his chuunin years. While on a simple retrieval mission, that involved the saving of a young genin who was stuck in iron country, Kamina came across a rather large humming bird that was lying on the ground, bloody and injured. Stopping in his tracks, Kamina approached the bird, who appeared to be unconscious Kamina tore apart his clothing and dressed the still unconcious bird. He bound him tightly, and slung him across his back, running more carefully. From there, he completed the rescue mission, and returned to konoha.

He saw the bird to the hospital, and the bird was treated in a courtyard in the middle of it. He sat by the bird's side day and night. As the bird's condition improved, Kamina and Kajiyoku developed an incredible bond, and Kamina began recieving telepathic communications from him. After fully nurtured, The bird spat out a scroll, and explained to Kamina that she could be his summon. Kamina was eager to accept and signed his name in blood, forever linking himself to the bird. Several times a week, Kamina would summon kajiyoku, and the two would train together. Kamina trained with her throughout the years, and she grew with him. While just B rank when Kamina met her, he trained her to the power and skill of S rank.
Summons Jutsu:
Daitoppa - Great Breakthrough
Rank: C
Ninjutsu
Fuuton • Daitoppa is a Ninjutsu technique which utilizes the Wind Element. After bringing his hand to his mouth, Orochimaru will blow a large blast of wind capable of leveling almost anything in its way. A variation of the technique involves a smaller blast of wind which gets ignited with flame.

Renkuudan - Drilling Air Projectile
Rank: A
Ninjutsu
Fuuton • Renkuudan is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Wind Element. The demon Shukaku inhales a large amount of air into his chest and then slams his fist into his chest to expel it. To strengthen the attack Shukaku will imbue chakra into the air. When expelled it forms concussive spherical projectiles capable of inflicting large damage.

Kamaitachi no Jutsu - Slashing Wind Skill
Rank- A
Type: Ninjutsu
Description: A jutsu that creates large gusts of wind, usually from a fan strike, but in this summon's case, from beating her wings so swiftly and imbuing them with chakra.


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PostSubject: Re: Littner, Kamina [Hokage] Tue 30 Mar 2010, 4:45 am

Name: Kuchiyose no Jutsu - Summoning Technique
Rank:C
Type: Ninjutsu
Element:N/A
Description: A powerful jutsu, Ninpo Kuchiyose allows a ninja to summon animals, objects and the dead to fight on their behalf. There are many ways in which the ninja can sign a contract with a summon but it is usually done with the ninja signing a blood contract with the animal species. This allows the user to summon different size and skilled animals to fight along side them, or on their behalf.

Name: Suimen Hokou no Waza - Act of Water Surface Walking
Rank: E
Type: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: A variation on the Kinobori no Waza (Act of Tree Climbing), the art of water surface walking allows a ninja to walk on water as if it was a solid surface. Focusing an even amount of chakra out of the soles of their feet, they can balance themselves on the very surface of the water

Name: Kinobori no Waza - Act of Tree Climbing
Rank: E
Type: N/A
Element: N/A
Description: Kinobori no Waza, the art of tree climbing serves a dual purpose. Taking part in Kinobori Shugyou (Tree Climbing Training) helps a ninja learn how to focus their chakra. It also teaches the ninja how to run up trees and walk on vertical walls. The training helps the ninja learn how to focus just the right amount of chakra to a particular part of their body. The amount needed to climb is small but it must be precise. The feet are regarded as the hardest location to master chakra focusing. So by gaining the art of this skill, the ninja will have any jutsu available (theoretically) because they will be able to focus their chakra as needed

Name: Explosion Tag: Activate
Rank: E
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: The user will activate an explosion tag. Normally, the tag will be placed by them, so they know where it is and can easily activate it.

Name: Kai - Release
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: Kai is a Ninjutsu technique which allows the ninja to avoid the effects of a Genjutsu illusion. After forming the needed handseals, the Genjutsu technique will not affect the ninja. The ninja can also use the technique on another individual who was unable to avoid the attack. After forming the needed hand seals, the ninja touches the one affected to end the affect of the spell.

Name: Shunshin no Jutsu - Body Flicker Technique
Rank: D
Element: N/A
Description: Shunshin no Jutsu is a basic Ninjutsu technique. The ninja will appear and disappear in an instant, allowing them to retreat or attack suddenly. To facilitate the movement the ninja will often use nearby elements such as mist, sand or leaves to mask their appearance or disappearance.

Bunshin no Jutsu [Clone Technique]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: E (Basic)
Requirements: None.
Description: This technique must be mastered by any ninja who has graduated from the shinobi academy. It's the most basic technique a Genin must know, since it can be a real lifesaver. This ninjutsu creates a simple illusion clone identical to the caster. The clone however has no physical properties and will disperse the moment it is touched.

Henge no Jutsu [Transformation Technique]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: E (Basic)
Requirements: None.
Description: Henge is the basic skill a ninja must know to become a Genin. It's mostly used as a decoy, to confuse the opponent by transforming into somebody that's an ally with the enemy, and then attack from the back when he's not expecting it. This technique can easily be combined with other jutsus for a more powerful effect, such as with Kage Bunshin no Jutsu [Shadow Clone Technique].

Kakuremino no Jutsu [Self Hiding Technique]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: E
Requirements: None.
Description: Either prior to or right after the use of this jutsu, the user hides themselves, often by means of hiding behind a cloak, in a bush, or such. Afterwards, they used their chakra to make them camouflage better with their environment. If the user is not hidden well, this has no effect, however, it can make a user that is well hidden, or beneath a cloak that is very close in appearance to their surroundings become almost invisible to anyone at a distance, though it's more obvious at 10 feet or closer that they're hiding.

Kawarimi no Jutsu [Body Switch Technique]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: E (Basic)
Requirements: None.
Description: Kawarimi is a widely used and very famous skill among shinobi. The user taps into their chakra and exchanges places with an object of similar weight and size. This is clearly an evasion technique used ge attacks; however it can be linked with other jutsus or attacks to create massive damage if done properly.

Nawanuke no Jutsu [Rope Untying Skill]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: E (Basic)
Requirements: None.
Description: This jutsu gives you the ability to easily free yourself from a rope or any other object made from something similar to a rope. This jutsu works merely by inserting chakra into the rope, and requires no hand seals.

Utsusemi no Jutsu [Projection Technique]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: D
Requirements: None.
Description: In order to hide their location and not disclose their position, the user projects their voice by resonating everything they say from all possible directions with this jutsu. This Jutsu works absolutely, and cannot be detected by normal ears. Someone who has chakra seeing abilities, such as the uchiha, could notice the difference, as could a clan based on sound. The 'bounces' can not be simply tracked back by anyone with a honed ear, as the technique occurs along side the user's voice, making the sound appear to come from everywhere.

Tomegane no Jutsu [Telescope Technique]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: A
Requirements: A Crystal Ball, Kage.
Description: One is able to view through any different areas within the country by a clairvoyant crystal ball. This is a great skill for looking or tracking down somebody. This skill only works for viewing inside a village, and though they can scan and see everything that's happening, they cannot magically be alerted if something bad happens, they must stumble upon it themself.

Gikyoshin [Chivalrous Spirit]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: B
Requirements: Blade.
Description: This is a ranged jutsu for blade users. Specifically close-range weapon users. This technique was developed to give them some range. Chakra is forced into the blade of their weapon. Afterward it is blasted out in a crescent moon shaped wave. The wave starts about half the size of the user. But it then expands the farther it travels. This increases it's attack range but spreads out the chakra weakening the wave on average. This technique doesn't cut but rather it bruises using the energy of the chakra. The wave can go no farther than 50m, and loses half it's power at 30m

Katon: Hotsuba [Fire Release: Fire Spit]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: D
Requirements: None.
Description: Using fire chakra, The user would spit a small flame from their mouth to help ignite anything that is flammable. This technique requires no handseals, as it is really quite basic. The flame they expel couldn't really be used offensively. This only works on items like paper, a dry wood, or an oil or gasoline like object.

Katon: Hi Saiku [Fire Release: Fire Trick]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: D
Requirements: None.
Description: After forming a few handseals the user rubs his hands together very quickly. As soon as the user's hands are hot he touches the opponent and pushes some chakra out from his hands. The resulting effect is a quick flash of heat through the opponent's body.

Katon: Hi Sunappu no Jutsu [Fire Release: Fire Snap]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: D
Requirements: Must be able to click their fingers.
Description: This Jutsu was made as apart of a magic act for a traveling magician who used to be a shinobi, but is now taught as a basic fire jutsu. The user makes a hand symbol and then clicks their fingers on one hand, a small jet of flame (Maximum 5 centimeters) protrudes from the users hand and lasts for up to a minute, not harming the user as the flame starts around a half centimeter away from the skin. However constant use may cause burning as the skin slowly heats up. This jutsu's purpose is almost entirely non combative

Katon: Moesashi [Flame Release: Embers]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: D
Requirements: None.
Description: The user will first do handseals, Then focus fire chakra, and then they can spit small embers at their opponent. Unlike Fire Spit, these embers are physical and can harm an opponent beyond the fire contact. Their is a limit of 5 embers, and to spit more will cost a D rank worth of chakra per 5 embers

Katon: Karui Yakedo [Fire Release: Minor Burn]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: D
Requirements: None
Description: After a few hand seals, the user's hand becomes hot. When the hand touches the target, it creates a small burn. Although not very damaging, it is very annoying to the opponent, and creates a discomforting feeling in some places. This could also be used to seal a wound, if necessary.

Katon: Osoi Hinawa [Fire Release: Quick Fuse]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: D
Requirements: Fuel.
Description: The user makes a few hand seals and points to a nearby fuel for fire. The corresponding object ignites into a fire which expands rapidly. The fuel must be quickly ignitable and it must be in decent reach, such as 50ft or more

Kesu [Extinguish]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: D
Requirements: None.
Description: Taught as a basic technique for safety reasons, the user is able to focus chakra to slowly dissipate flames. While using this technique, the user is unable to activate any other jutsu. This jutsu takes a decent amount of time to work. It has no actual defensive capabilities, and isn't designed for comabt use

Moufu [Blanket]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: D
Requirements: None.
Description: Useful for things such as cold weather or being wet, the user is able to contain heat within an area. The size of the target is fairly open ended, ranging from a match to a campfire or larger. Activation of the jutsu is as simple as touching the object with one's palm(s) and directing warming katon chakra into it. However, if the target of this jutsu is hit, the jutsu dispels. It's purely for non offensive use, though it could be used against a jutsu that makes everything cold.

Katon: Boukaheki no Jutsu [Fire Release: Fire Wall Technique]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: C-B
Requirements: None.
Description: By performing a few seals, the user can exhale a steady stream of fire creating a wall in front of them and partially surrounding them. It's capable of evaporating water and low level Suiton jutsus, and used as a great defense against physical strikes. The max rank of suiton that can be evaporated is D if C rank is used, C if B rank is used. User can start at C, and increase to B at the next post, but cannot go from B to C.

Katon: Housenka no Jutsu [Fire Release: Mythical Fire Flower Technique]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Requirements: None.
Description: This Katon ninjutsu is a very flexible technique. Housenka begins with creating many small fireballs from the user's mouth, and shooting them at a single or multiple opponents in one strike. These projectiles either can be shot either fast in the same direction, or in a rotating formation. The ninja controls the basic path of the fireballs.

Katon: Kasai no Ame [Fire Release: Rain of Fire Technique]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: B
Requirements: None.
Description: This is a jutsu utilizing the fire element. The user performs a few seals and begins concentrating chakra into his hands. Eventually he will manipulate it into a ball of fire completely surrounding both hands, and then fired into the air. The two fireballs will collide and then split into 10-20 separate fireballs which will proceed to rain down on the area as commanded by the user. They are a little bit bigger then Housenka fire balls. The range of the area targeted is roughly 10-20 sq meters.

Katon: Kasai no Kakuchou [Flame Release: Fire Extension]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Requirements: None.
Description: After finishing the handseals, the user will be able to strike empty air, and simultaneously, a firey version of his fist or kick will be created where his target is, striking at them. This kick will have the same power that the user's kick or punch had. The limit for range is 3 m. The Extension is about twice as large as the user's original limb, though it has the same power.

Katon: Neppa [Fire Release: Heat Wave]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Requirements: None.
Description: After a few handseals the user concentrates chakra in his hands then slaps them together and splits them apart releasing chakra resulting in a painful wave of heat towards his target. This wave of heat is only visible by the air it distorts, and other than that isn't detectable. This wave of heat is about 4m tall, and 5m wide

Katon: Shiyoretsu Riku [Flame Release: Burning Land]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Requirements: None.
Description: As soon as the user finishes the required handseals for this jutsu, his feet start to glow in an orange light. From that moment on, the user leaves a trail of burnt land behind him as he moves, even if aerial, the user will leave a trail of fading sparks. Kawarimi and shunshin will result in a similar effect, though it'll be in a more concentrated line, and not over as wide an area. This jutsu lasts for 3 posts, unless the user decides to put in a D rank amount of chakra every post after that.


Katon: Enkou Tou [Flame Release: Flame Tower]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: B
Requirements: None.
Description: After doing a series of handseals, the user slams his palms down to the ground. The impact then appears to cause turbulence under the dirt as it afterwards explodes into a fountain of fire that moves ahead towards the target at about 20 miles an hour. The fountain is high enough to be described a tower, standing at about 20m, and it can move according to the user's will but only ahead and veering to the sides, it can't revert back. When the user decides, it will discharge in a blast, and blow nearby objects away, as well as setting them on fire, or leaving severe burns.

Katon: Kaen Torappu [Fire Release: Flame Trap]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: B
Description: After performing a set of hand seals, the user rubs both hands up together and then places their hands on the ground. Once this is complete, a sea of flames surrounds the enemies and entraps them in this ‘prison’ from which they will be unable to escape from unless they are willing to take life threatening burns. In order for this jutsu to be maintained, the user must always have their hands on the ground and be constantly supplying chakra to the prison. C rank chakra drain per turn. The prison is a simple column of flames, thats closed on the top by more flames. No jutsu can be used while using this one, as your hands must remain holding the Tiger handseal.

Katon: Kasai Tacchi [Fire Release: Fire Touch Technique]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: B
Requirements: None.
Description: This jutsu utilizes the fire element. The user concentrates heat into their hands, and by placing it on an inanimate object for a few moments the object heats up to the point it bursts into flames. The amount of chakra and time it take depends on the size and it cannot be larger then the user. Used on a flammable object, it will simply catch fire. A non flammable object, such as rock or glass, would break after enough time (1 post for anything smaller than .5mx.5m, 2 posts for 2mx2m, 3 posts for 5mx5m. Everything larger takes 3 posts, but with will cost an additional B rank worth of chakra per 15m of length and width.).

Ryuusei Sutoraiku [Meteor Strike]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: B
Requirement: Appropriate strength.
Description: Using a boulder that already exists, The user hurls a boulder into the air and jumps up after it performing the right hand seals. The user then grabs the boulder in mid-air and, through Katon manipulation, covers it with fire and jumps up after it performing the right hand seals. This creates a blazing meteor to attack with, which could also be blown up into a gush of small flaming rocks. Each stone is about 2 square inches, roughly, obviously they will be jagged. The amount of stones depends on the size of the boulder. The boulder cannot be taller than the User.

Katon: Enen no Sonata [Fire Release: Blazing Sonata]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: A
Requirements: None.
Description: This technique was developed by a legendary shinobi, who retired into an occupation as one of the greatest chef's in the land. As the chef's greatest assets were his hands, this technique was devised as a unique style of using ones feet to defend, in a dance like motion. This idea was then improved upon, by focusing chakra into the user’s feet, and then, coupling it with a bit of fire mastery was able to mold the chakra to surround the user’s feet within a controlled fire. Every step fans the fire into the motion's direction, every stomp raises the fires causing it to flare up, every kick sends a penance of fire from the sole, and adding this into a dance causes it to not only defends ones self but by mastering the right steps can make for a very reliable offense. This Jutsu lasts just 2 posts.

Katon: Honoo Sude [Fire Release: Blazing Hands]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: A
Requirements: None.
Description: After the user performs the necessary hand seals, their hands heat up and then burst into flames. The flames do not harm the user, but provide a great advantage at hand to hand combat, and is quite useful in nature, such as for starting a fire or scaring people. This lasts 2 posts.

Chikei no Naraku no Jutsu [Terrain of Hell Technique]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: S
Requirements: None
Description: After a very long series of handseals, the user holds the Dragon seal. As the user stands in one spot, the ground within 100 meters of his or her body will begin to ignite. As larger and larger fires start, they will begin to spread outward from the original location, always traveling away from the user. Eventually, the fires created by this jutsu will become raging infernos, eating away at anything and everything in their path. This jutsu can cause devastation to any environment, as the flames are spread by chakra, and not any type of physical fuel such as grass.

Katon: Gouryuuka no Jutsu [Flame Release: Great Dragon Fire Technique]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: S
Requirement: Housenka no Jutsu [Mythical Fire Flower Technique].
Description: After forming the needed handseals, the ninja will expel dragon head fireballs at their opponent. These powerful fireballs can punch through concrete or pierce through a forest burning a long line of trees a 100m back. Being such a powerful and draining jutsu, this technique can only be performed once or twice per battle by the strongest of ninjas.

Katon: Mori no Ho Kami [Fire Release: Lance of the Fire God]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: S
Requirements: None
Description: After a long series of handseals, the user opens his or her mouth. A small ball of flame appears in front of his or her mouth, no larger than a golf ball. A loud whistling sound can then be heard near the user. The user will place both hands, palms facing outwords on either side of the fireball, but behind it. After a few seconds, the ball will burst forward into a small stream of fire, expanding to be 7 feet in diamter. It bursts forward with enough force to punch holes through trees. The stream extends forward 150 meters before ending it's burst. Once the stream reaches 150 meters, it remains for 3 seconds.

Name: Silent Step Technique
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu/general Skill
Element: none
Description: This jutsu is merely a technique that allows the user to stop their movements from making any noise. Things like rustling of clothing, stepping on twigs, and other noises no longer occur. This occurs from coating there body in an incredibly thin layer of chakra that holds everything perfectly in place, as well as adding a soft layer beneath the feet to stop the breaking of twigs or any sounds from moving.

Name: Ultimate Destruction!!! Fiery Death!!
Rank: D
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: Fire
Description: This jutsu is an incredibly useful technique. using it creates a flame that envelops the user's body. The Flame however, burns at an incredibly low temperature, just 104 degrees fahrenheit. Because of this, it does not hurt the user, but can give them the appearance of being set on fire. Used in conjunction with Some ash, invisibility, and the right timing, this jutsu could even be used to fake ones own death.


Name: Weapon Invisibility Technique
Rank: C
Type: Ninjutsu/Weaponry
Element: none
Description: This technique allows a user to make a single weapon invisible for up to 2 posts. The blade or item can be no longer than 10 feet long. The user may also choose to only make part of the weapon invisible, and this would have some obvious advantages and disadvantages over full object invisibility. This jutsu functions in the same way as the shadowing stealth technique.

Name: Chakra Push
Rank: B
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: None
Description: With this jutsu, the user will form chakra in their hand before shoving outwards at a target. If they are within 5 feet of the user, the chakra that is expelled will both knock the opponent away about 15 feet¬, and cause damage as the chakra cuts them. This jutsu causes extreme cuts on the targets outside, ripping their clothes to shreds.

Kasumi Enbu no Jutsu - Mist Waltz Technique
Art: Ninjutsu
Rank: D-B
Description: Katon • Kasumi Enbu no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Fire Element. The ninja does a string of hand seals and then proceeds to blow a large combustible mist at the target. When the mist hits flame, it will ignite in an explosion of fire. At D rank, it covers a 5mx5m area, at C 10mx10m and at B, 20mx20m.

Housenka no Jutsu - Mythical Fire Phoenix Technique
Art: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Description: Katon • Housenka no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Fire Element. The ninja does the necessary hand seals and then emits a series of small fireballs. The ninja can also hurl a projectile, which is covered in these same flames. To the opponent, the attack appears to be only the balls of flame. Meaning that even if the flames are put out, the projectiles will still converge on the target. The flames can be used to cover different projectiles like shuriken or kunai, or none at all.

Goukakyuu no Jutsu - Great Fireball Technique
Art: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Description: Katon • Goukakyuu no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Fire Element. The ninja does the necessary hand seals, draws chakra from their mouth into their chest, and then immediately exhales it. They then blow a stream of fire, which erupts into a large sphere of flames. To better manage the flames, the ninja will bring their hand to their mouth to control it.

Karyuu Endan - Fire Dragon Flame Projectile
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: B
Description: Katon • Karyuu Endan is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Fire Element. The ninja does a string of hand seals and the proceeds to blow a large jet of fire from their mouth.


Gouryuuka no Jutsu - Great Dragon Fire Technique
Art: Ninjutsu
Rank: A
Description: A Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Fire Element. After forming the needed hand seals, the ninja will expel a powerful fireball that takes the form of a dragon’s head. Powerful fireballs like these carry the capability of punching through something as strong as concrete with ease.

Haisekishou - Burning Ash Accumulation
Art: Ninjutsu
Rank: A
Description: Katon • Haisekishou is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Fire Element. After forming the needed hand seals, the user will expel ash from their mouth. This large cloud will begin to envelope a foe and when the user clicks their teeth, the cloud will ignite in an explosion.



Raiton: Kaminari Saiku [Lightning Release: Lightning Trick]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: D
Description: After the user performs a few hand seals and rubs his or her hands together the user concentrates chakra in their hands. After enough friction is created the user exerts the chakra while touching someone to give them an amplified static shock.

Raiton: Seiteki Shokku [Lightning Release: Static Shock]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: D
Requirements: A metal object.
Description: By focusing chakra into a metal object, the user can supply the object with a small charge that will cause a static shock to the next person who touches it; this applies to the user as well. This shock will be strong enough to cause a sudden jolt in the affected. This requires touching the object

Raiton: Raisentan [Lightning Release: Lightning Tip]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Requirements: Metal bladed weapon.
Description: The user guides his Raiton chakra to settle a small amount of chakra at the tip or tips of a wielded electricity-conducting weapon. The chakra causes that area to glow with a yellow gleam and leave a trail of yellow light as it moves through the air. That tip will cause a very mild electrostatic shock to skin other than the users that comes in contact with it.

Raiton: Hagane no Tsubasa[Lightning Release: Wings of Steel]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Requirements: None
Description: By making handseals and chanelling lightning chakra, the user will place their hands against a cliff, or on the ground adjascent to a cliff, and send a surge of splicing electrical energy up it. The result is cutting the cliff or rockwall into pieces, creating a huge rockslide

Raiton: Kougeki Boreto [Lightning Release: Offensive Bolt]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Requirements: Two metal projectiles.
Description: After a few hand seals the user charges his two metal projectiles, one in each hand, with electricity creating a bolt between them. The user can then throw them with the bolt in-between zapping anything that it passes through. The limit for the space between the two is 10m. Past 10m, the damage done decreases by one rank.

Raiton: Kaminari Waia- Shokku [Lightning Release: Lightning Wire Shock]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Requirements: Any kind of electricity-conducting wire or chain.
Description: This is a technique where the user attempts to conduct an electrical shock through a wire reaching to his target. This jutsu does require the use of handseals.

Raiton: Dendou Underi [Lightning Release: Electric Wave]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: C
Requirements: None.
Description: The user prepares for this technique with a set of handseals before attempting to send a circular planer faintly-yellow electric wave from their midsection expanding in all directions. The wave is basically to ward many enemies off, since it's painful to be touched by, because it stings many times. It's 5m tall, and 20m wide

Raiton: Ikazuchi no Kiba [Lightning Release: Thunder Fang]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: B
Requirements: None
Description: The user creates an electrified chakra-filled essence that rises into the clouds to activate lightning bolts that come crashing down on his desired target. The amount of chakra uses to rise to the clouds is equal to the power and damage the lightning bolts cause. This is obviously not as fast as real lightning. The damage done is equal to 1 rank below the jutsu per increase, because the jutsu is split up into a few strikes.

Raiton: Kaminari Shuriken [Lightning Release: Lightning Shuriken]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: B
Requirement: Shuriken.
Description: The user augments the shuriken with Raiton chakra then throws it above his enemy. This will rain down sever bolts of lightning towards the opponent, opening passing over or hitting them. This technique does not require the use of handseals.

Raiton: Raizou Ikazuchi wo Utte [Lightning Release: Thunderbolt Strike]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: B
Requirements: None
Description: Using their weapon, the user creates several thunderbolts that cut through the ground. These thunderbolts do a fair amount of damage, and have the capacity to temorarily paralyze, or numb parts of their target's body for 3 posts. These bolts are about 4 feet long and can travel up to 30m

Raiton: Sa-ji Furasshu [Lightning Release: Surge Flash]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: B
Requirements: None.
Description: Upon terminating his handseals, the user's hands begin to light up with little sparks of electricity and then once he directs a thrust at a certain direction, they shoot out several waves of lightning glints. These glints are small, but in huge amount, making them blinding to view, and when they all hit something, the result is quite painful.

Gian [False Darkness]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: A
Description: After gathering a large amount of chakra into ones mouth, they open it and exhale to release a strong bolt of electricity from their mouth, that is roughly 3 feet in diameter This strong attack can be defended against by a powerful attack or defense. The bolt shoots out up to 100m

Kogian [Great False Darkness]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: S
Description: After gathering an extreme amount of chakra into ones mouth, they open it and exhale to release a strong bolt of electricity from their mouth, that is roughly 6 feet in diameter. This strong attack can be defended against by an equally powerful attack or defense. The bolt shoots out up to 200m

Raiton: Go Hibana Yubi no Jutsu [Lightning Release: Five-Spark Finger Technique]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: A
Requirements: None.
Description: The user creates a small ball of electricity on the tip of each finger that he can shoot out at any time he wishes, while the jutsu is active. (gets 10 shots max before having to be re-used, though if they have less then 10 finers, they only get as many shots as how many fingers they have) These balls of electricity travel very quickly and fade after traveling a range of 10 meters. Each ball is able to cause a convulsion and a light burn when they strike the target.

Raiton: Raigeki no Yoroi [Lightning Release: Lightning Armor]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: A
Requirements: None
Description: Rotating their weapon, the user surrounds himself with electricity which protects him by electrocuting anyone who makes contact with it. This lightning armor also provides protection against regular objects and items, as well as ninjutsu of C rank or less, with the exception being Wind techniques.

Raiton: Rairyu no Tatsumaki [Lightning Release: Lightning Dragon Tornado]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: A
Requirements: None
Description: Gathering electricity onto one spot, the user spins around very quickly, forming it into the likeness into a head of a dragon. Once lightning is drawn upon his body, a spinning current will occur affecting anyone or anything in the area, temporarily trapping them in a spiral-like vortex and causing great damage. This is a fairly destructive jutsu.

Raivu Waiya-: Senkou [Live Wire: Flash]
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: A
Requirements: Live Wire.
Description: The user slams their palms to the ground and sends a visible line of electricity that travels along the ground from the user to an opponent, controlled by the user at a very significant speed. This gush of electricity can travel to as far as twenty meters and is hard to dodge due to its speed. When it reaches the opponent, it burns them with electricity and paralyzes them for 3 posts


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((Note, this is 700 words. It will never drop below the minimum, and will always average out at about 500 words))

Ling sat up with a smile on his face from a big desk. He was far beneath Konohagakure, in a wide space. It was currently filled with food and had an underground stream with fresh water. For many days now, Ling has been underground, readying Konoha for his departure. There was only one step left until it was completed, but a summary of what Ling had already done would best be looked at first.

On the first Day, Ling went just outside Konoha's gate, and used alchemy to travel far beneath Konoha. He sealed the gate as he entered. Sat down in his narrow tunnel in the dead center of Konohagakure no Sato. He folded his legs and relaxed his arms. He clapped his arms together and left them there As the earth glowed blue, as it expanded suddenly outwards. As he was in a meditative position, his use of spiritual energy was 500% more efficient. After the space was entirely cleared out, he built houses out of the earth, and stone. He successfully create a fallout shelter capable of housing all of Konoha's residents. But it wasn't this shelter that would play a role in events to come, but rather what would be directly above it.

After finishing the space in which the resident's of konoha could occupy in time of emergency, Ling rested for the night. When he awoke the next morning, he immediately got to work again. The first thing he did was connect this place through what would be the center of a massive transmutation circle. The entrance to this cavern was now in one of the many underground merchant tunnels. However, it was hidden, and access would only be able in an emergency. There are several tubes, that wind down that lead down from the entrance to a larger underground building. Because of the structure, there would be no getting backed up in the tubes, do to their size, and do the shape they take, no injury is possible. After another night of rest, Ling took the next day to create an underground river, fed from the ocean and other bodies of water throughout Konoha. This river would provide fresh clean water for bathing and drinking while Konoha was down here. During this day, he also turned grass, trees, and water, from the above land into foods like bread, pasta, and other such products. These tasks being extremely complex, they took all of the day.

On the 4th Day, Ling constructed the transmutation circle and it's activation point. The circle was an absolutely massive construction that filled the area in-between the merchant tunnels and the newly constructed fallout structure. The circle spanned all of konoha, and looked like this-
[there was a pic]
The Activator for the circle was but a simple, unnoticeable notch in a tree, which was slightly taller then the rest. When activated, The circle would target water, and all living beings above the circle would be entirely frozen, killing them instantly, as the water and blood in their bodies froze. Now, because it required alchemical energy to activate a transmutation circle, Ling had to spend one more day in preparation. For the entirety of the 5th day, he meditated, and turned spiritual energy, Alchemical Energy, into a crystalline form. By the end of the day, he was almost entirely drained of his energy, and so he slept, awaking the next day, rejuvenated.

Ling travelled to the building in which the entrance to the fallout shelter could be accessed. From there, he climbed up the only tube which had a ladder on it, and exited into the merchant tunnel. From there, he walked to the Hokage's palace, and went past the receptionist, into the Hokage's office. The Hokage wasn't there, which was all the better. Ling Left a note which entirely described what the Circle's use would be in case of an attack, as well as how to activate it, and other procedures to take. On top of the note, Ling left the crystal, which shone blue, glowing without refracting any outside light. With that, Ling turned and exited the room, and then the palace. Out on the streets, Ling made his departure quick. He clapped his hands together, and dissappeared, as he dissassembled himself from this world, and reassembled himself in his own.


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PostSubject: Re: Littner, Kamina [Hokage] Tue 30 Mar 2010, 5:04 am

RP Sample

I promise that as a kage, my posts shall average 600-700 words or more, never dropping below 500.
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PostSubject: Re: Littner, Kamina [Hokage] Tue 06 Apr 2010, 5:41 pm

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Koe no Mozouhin [Voice Imitation]
Rank: D
Requirements: None.
Description: The user uses chakra to alter his larynx and vocal tract to change the way his voice sounds. This can be used to make the user sound like an animal, an adult, of the opposite sex, etc. This ability requires neither chakra nor hand seals.

User uses chakra to alter Larynx. Ability requires no chakra or hand seals. Slight problem there.

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Washihishou no Jutsu [Eagle Flight Technique]
Rank: B
Requirements: None.
Description: This technique is an enhancer. The user pumps charka into their muscles to allow for a heightened burst of speed and they also use their charka to enhance their visual awareness, making it sharper and more effective.

Edit to say that the burst of speed lasts 1 post. Or have it say that the speed lasts X posts, with a chakra drain per post.

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Katon: Neppa [Fire Release: Heat Wave]
Rank: C
Requirements: None.
Description: After a few handseals the user concentrates chakra in his hands then slaps them together and splits them apart releasing chakra resulting in a painful wave of heat towards his target.

The one problem I have with this is its heat, and that kind of jutsu has been designated to the Magma clan Todd created and had approved.

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Katon: Kaen Torappu [Fire Release: Flame Trap]
Rank: B
Description: After performing a set of hand seals, the user rubs both hands up together and then places their hands on the ground. Once this is complete, a sea of flames surrounds the enemies and entraps them in this ‘prison’ from which they will be unable to escape from unless they are willing to take life threatening burns. In order for this jutsu to be maintained, the user must always have their hands on the ground and be constantly supplying chakra to the prison.

Chakra drain needed. Im not gonna tell you its gonna be a B-Rank amount of chakra per turn active, even as a Kage thats a bit much.

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Name: Weapon Invisibility Technique
Rank: B
Type: Ninjutsu/Weaponry
Element: none
Description: This technique allows a user to make a single weapon invisible for up to 3 posts. There is no size limit, as long as it is something he can wield.

2 post length.

Gouryuuka: You have this twice. Once before the bolded template, and once after.

The lightning ill need to look over again once the following, and previous, edits are made:

All jutsu should be in the sites template.

Try and expand on some of the jutsu descriptions. Some one one line, some are 3, try to average them.
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PostSubject: Re: Littner, Kamina [Hokage] Sat 10 Apr 2010, 4:07 pm

Caranore wrote:
Quote :
Koe no Mozouhin [Voice Imitation]
Rank: D
Requirements: None.
Description: The user uses chakra to alter his larynx and vocal tract to change the way his voice sounds. This can be used to make the user sound like an animal, an adult, of the opposite sex, etc. This ability requires neither chakra nor hand seals.

User uses chakra to alter Larynx. Ability requires no chakra or hand seals. Slight problem there.

Quote :
It uses chakra, manipulating the flow in your larynx, but only changes the flow, you don't actually expend any chakra.

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Washihishou no Jutsu [Eagle Flight Technique]
Rank: B
Requirements: None.
Description: This technique is an enhancer. The user pumps charka into their muscles to allow for a heightened burst of speed and they also use their charka to enhance their visual awareness, making it sharper and more effective.

Edit to say that the burst of speed lasts 1 post. Or have it say that the speed lasts X posts, with a chakra drain per post.
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Changed to 3 posts, with a D rank drain per post

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Katon: Neppa [Fire Release: Heat Wave]
Rank: C
Requirements: None.
Description: After a few handseals the user concentrates chakra in his hands then slaps them together and splits them apart releasing chakra resulting in a painful wave of heat towards his target.

The one problem I have with this is its heat, and that kind of jutsu has been designated to the Magma clan Todd created and had approved.
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Magma isnt heat though. It's just releasing plain fire chakra instead of in a physical form

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Katon: Kaen Torappu [Fire Release: Flame Trap]
Rank: B
Description: After performing a set of hand seals, the user rubs both hands up together and then places their hands on the ground. Once this is complete, a sea of flames surrounds the enemies and entraps them in this ‘prison’ from which they will be unable to escape from unless they are willing to take life threatening burns. In order for this jutsu to be maintained, the user must always have their hands on the ground and be constantly supplying chakra to the prison.

Chakra drain needed. Im not gonna tell you its gonna be a B-Rank amount of chakra per turn active, even as a Kage thats a bit much.

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Changed to C rank drain

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Name: Weapon Invisibility Technique
Rank: B
Type: Ninjutsu/Weaponry
Element: none
Description: This technique allows a user to make a single weapon invisible for up to 3 posts. There is no size limit, as long as it is something he can wield.

2 post length.

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Changed

Gouryuuka: You have this twice. Once before the bolded template, and once after.

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okay

The lightning ill need to look over again once the following, and previous, edits are made:

All jutsu should be in the sites template.

Try and expand on some of the jutsu descriptions. Some one one line, some are 3, try to average them.

I'll work on it, haven't made the changes yet, but I will.
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PostSubject: Re: Littner, Kamina [Hokage] Tue 13 Apr 2010, 3:13 am

Completion bump

and I actually have two different versions of Gouryukka. An S rank one and an A rank one =)
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PostSubject: Re: Littner, Kamina [Hokage] Tue 13 Apr 2010, 3:15 am

Quite a few of your jutsu descriptions are too short, being only a line or less in length. They should all be upped to at least three lines to provide an adequate description of the jutsu, few if any can be properly explained so briefly.
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PostSubject: Re: Littner, Kamina [Hokage] Tue 13 Apr 2010, 3:55 am

My bad, they're not mine =)
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PostSubject: Re: Littner, Kamina [Hokage] Tue 13 Apr 2010, 4:04 am

Riptide: Well, to start, its S-rank and you have kenjutsu as a sub (which needs to be changed to weaponry and edited to swords and whatever other type.). The profession blade abilities need a chakra cost. For the assassins blade, how long is the paralysis to the opponents limb? For Boxer's Blade, the number of hits it takes to cause sever damage should be lowered considering that the sword can break other weapons in one hit and effectively kill an opponent in another.

Kakuremino no Jutsu [Self Hiding Technique]: I don't see this as a jutsu at all, considering that the level of camouflage would entirely depend on the cloak used, not the jutsu.

Koe no Mozouhin [Voice Imitation]: This technique is rather vague and I don't like it. How would this go past a normal humans ability to make a sound if it doesn't use chakra? Is it cannon?

Tomegane no Jutsu [Telescope Technique]: We've all seen the hokage do this, but did he ever look outside of the village with this jutsu? Even if he did he would of needed a way to detect where things were in order to pin point this location to make this jutsu useful.

Hateshiganairyuu [Eternal Dragon]: Making things this large of of pure chakra would be either Zane's or Senkou's clan trait, not a normal ninjas.

Put the jutsu in the correct template, your jutsu don't have a "Type"

Hassei [Speaking]: This is a trait of the Kaiku clan, please remove.

Sonikku Himei [Sonic Scream]: This is a trait of the Musami clan, please remove.

Netsushi [Thermal Vision] (Doujutsu): Quite frankly, I don't see how this is possible by "focusing chakra to their eyes.". This would be more eijutsu then anything else.

Washihishou no Jutsu [Eagle Flight Technique]: Eijutsu, please remove.

Anshi [Night Vision]: See Thermal Vision.

Kebari Senbon [Thousand Hair Needles] Flesh it out a bit so it at least reaches the description minimum.

Kemuri Shiryoku no Jutsu [Fire Release: Smoke Sight Technique]: See Thermal Vision

Kesu [Extinguish]: How does chakra extinguish fire?

Boukaheki no Jutsu [Fire Release: Fire Wall Technique: By low I assume you mean D or C rank, but assumptions aren't a very good thing for this. Please state the level of suiton jutsu able to be evaporated.

Housenka no Jutsu [Fire Release: Mythical Fire Flower Technique]: Housenka?

Kasai no Kakuchou [Flame Release: Fire Extension] Fiery* and how large is the silhouette?

Ryuusei Sutoraiku [Meteor Strike]: Its kinda hard to light a boulder on fire without a catalyst right? o.o

Enen no Sonata [Fire Release: Blazing Sonata]: This is more of a style then a jutsu, also, this has no duration attached to it.

Hoheki [Fire Release: Flame Wall]: Don't you already have a flame wall jutsu?

Honoo Sude [Fire Release: Blazing Hands]: Duration.

Karyuu Endan [Flame Release: Fire Wall Attack]: By huge, what size are we talking about (Put it in the jutsu).

Yougan Fi-rudo no Sousaku [Fire Release: Lava Field Creation]: Lava is banned, remember? =P

Katon No jutsu (Art of Fire Technique): This doesn't make sense to me the way its worded, so some re wording would help.

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PostSubject: Re: Littner, Kamina [Hokage] Tue 13 Apr 2010, 4:30 am

Z wrote:
Riptide: Well, to start, its S-rank and you have kenjutsu as a sub (which needs to be changed to weaponry and edited to swords and whatever other type.). The profession blade abilities need a chakra cost. For the assassins blade, how long is the paralysis to the opponents limb? For Boxer's Blade, the number of hits it takes to cause sever damage should be lowered considering that the sword can break other weapons in one hit and effectively kill an opponent in another.

Kakuremino no Jutsu [Self Hiding Technique]: I don't see this as a jutsu at all, considering that the level of camouflage would entirely depend on the cloak used, not the jutsu.

Koe no Mozouhin [Voice Imitation]: This technique is rather vague and I don't like it. How would this go past a normal humans ability to make a sound if it doesn't use chakra? Is it cannon?

Tomegane no Jutsu [Telescope Technique]: We've all seen the hokage do this, but did he ever look outside of the village with this jutsu? Even if he did he would of needed a way to detect where things were in order to pin point this location to make this jutsu useful.

Hateshiganairyuu [Eternal Dragon]: Making things this large of of pure chakra would be either Zane's or Senkou's clan trait, not a normal ninjas.

Put the jutsu in the correct template, your jutsu don't have a "Type"

Hassei [Speaking]: This is a trait of the Kaiku clan, please remove.

Sonikku Himei [Sonic Scream]: This is a trait of the Musami clan, please remove.

Netsushi [Thermal Vision] (Doujutsu): Quite frankly, I don't see how this is possible by "focusing chakra to their eyes.". This would be more eijutsu then anything else.

Washihishou no Jutsu [Eagle Flight Technique]: Eijutsu, please remove.

Anshi [Night Vision]: See Thermal Vision.

Kebari Senbon [Thousand Hair Needles] Flesh it out a bit so it at least reaches the description minimum.

Kemuri Shiryoku no Jutsu [Fire Release: Smoke Sight Technique]: See Thermal Vision

Kesu [Extinguish]: How does chakra extinguish fire?

Boukaheki no Jutsu [Fire Release: Fire Wall Technique: By low I assume you mean D or C rank, but assumptions aren't a very good thing for this. Please state the level of suiton jutsu able to be evaporated.

Housenka no Jutsu [Fire Release: Mythical Fire Flower Technique]: Housenka?

Kasai no Kakuchou [Flame Release: Fire Extension] Fiery* and how large is the silhouette?

Ryuusei Sutoraiku [Meteor Strike]: Its kinda hard to light a boulder on fire without a catalyst right? o.o

Enen no Sonata [Fire Release: Blazing Sonata]: This is more of a style then a jutsu, also, this has no duration attached to it.

Hoheki [Fire Release: Flame Wall]: Don't you already have a flame wall jutsu?

Honoo Sude [Fire Release: Blazing Hands]: Duration.

Karyuu Endan [Flame Release: Fire Wall Attack]: By huge, what size are we talking about (Put it in the jutsu).

Yougan Fi-rudo no Sousaku [Fire Release: Lava Field Creation]: Lava is banned, remember? =P

Katon No jutsu (Art of Fire Technique): This doesn't make sense to me the way its worded, so some re wording would help.

I g2g because my mother is booting me off the computer, so I'll get the rest later

Art of Fire- It's just the basic technique for creating custom fire jutsu.

Lava Field- It's not a lava technique, it's physically heating up the earth.

Fire Wall Attack- I think I removed it

Blazing Hands- Will do

Blazing sonata- okies

Meteor Strike- Yeah, It'd be equally hard to light Ash on fire but nobody complains about that

Fixed most things

Thermal Vision?

Chakra can stop the fuel from being burned

Eijutsu?
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PostSubject: Re: Littner, Kamina [Hokage] Tue 13 Apr 2010, 4:38 am

Eijutsu is medical techniques.
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PostSubject: Re: Littner, Kamina [Hokage] Tue 13 Apr 2010, 3:00 pm

There are still things that remain un addressed that I posted, like a lot of things.

Lava Field: Turning earth to magma requires so much heat power it would be considered a magma jutsu either way.



Art of Fire : Makes no sense to me at all. Making custom jutsu is making custom jutsu with a template.

Meteor Strike: Two wrongs don't make a right.

Chakra can stop the fuel from being burned? How so?

And yeah, Thermal Vision and the other visions would be eijutsu.
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PostSubject: Re: Littner, Kamina [Hokage] Wed 14 Apr 2010, 12:15 am

The jutsu all need to be bolded and you're missing parts of the template, like Name and Type. You need to include all parts of the template that are applicable, especially since this is a Kage app and you're expected to do more than the usual. Regardless of how anal it seems it needs to be done, no avoiding it.

Also, since Z has decided to take the upper half of the application I'll only be going over that when he's finished, we'll probably trade off or something since I'm more equipped to handle Katon and he's more equipped to handle Raiton. Anyhow...

Oh and before that.

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My bad, they're not mine =)

Thats irrelevant, they still need more details regardless of if they're yours or not. If you can't add details because you don't own the jutsu, then you simply remove it because you won't be able to have it approved at its current length. This includes Canon techniques, they all need details and usually it takes three lines or more to do this.

Cara has also told you this:

Caranore wrote:

Try and expand on some of the jutsu descriptions. Some one one line, some are 3, try to average them.

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Jutsu:

Flaming Swallow; Fuuton is the only element that has been revealed to be invisible in its natural chakra form, therefore adding fire to it would remove the original invisible aspect of the original technique since that was based solely on wind chakra. Also, is this a one use cost? A film of chakra would seem to incur an upkeep cost in addition to its starting use.

Shadowing Stealth; why is it difficult to use in combat? And despite canon techniques lacking an explanation, I want an explanation presented here as to how you managed to make yourself invisible because the majority of explanations are beyond your character's capability to perform. Bending light? KKG element. Cellular manipulation? Eijutsu. Etc.

Presence Hiding; how does this work? You just say it works and don't provide any actual explanation which is what the jutsu description is usually for. If it works through repressing chakra, as I'd assume it does, then using that chakra would be difficult and incur penalties because you're actively trying to hold it down.

Weapon Invisibility; Explanation needed, how is that even possible? Also, there would need to be a size limit based on how much chakra you need to pump out to hide it, you're not running around with a 2 story tall invisible sword, not without drying your chakra to the bone anyhow. I can already see that this jutsu could be used with your weapon and cause problems when it gets larger, hence the 'no size limit' comment, and that size would require a greater chakra output to change. Assuming you find a way to have this make sense in the first place of course.

Chakra Push; how does this cause internal cuts? Chakra cuts from the outside, and also, you're going to need to explain what exactly its cutting because there are quite a few internal systems you could cut, assuming you retain the ability to do such a thing with your explanation. Seems like Eijutsu to me, but that depends on how its explained.

Chakra Blade; needs some edits if you intend to keep it. First off, since the blade is solid it wouldn't be a C Rank cost, especially since its solid enough to stop metal (which is a ridiculous claim in the first place because chakra is nowhere near solid enough in its pure form to do anything like that) and the statement 'all metal weapons' implies you can stop any metal weapon, even if they're stronger, and that won't fly.

Solid chakra, as I stated, can't be that strong in just a film and the amount of chakra you'd need to put out to create a blade of anything that solid would consume a hefty amount of chakra and striking it would slowly weaken it unless you added to its chakra substance. In addition, their has to be a limit on size or the jutsu could be abused to make sky scraper tall blades and then say 'Its in the jutsu, so I can.' At minimum it needs to say 'this jutsu can create a blade of any shape or size within reason'.

Also, how long does it take to change the shape? As it is you could freely change its form and shape which, once edited for the density required, would be a feat so there needs to be a time period and chakra amount expended to shift it.

Kage Bunshin; thats a terribly incorrect form of the jutsu, the clones halve your chakra, they don't take a preset amount, the jutsu divides your chakra evenly among all the clones that you create. Bypassing this flaw of the jutsu like described is a no unless you intend to make it a new jutsu and limit some of the benefits of the jutsu. It also doesn't describe the details of the technique like it should.

Katon Kage Bunshin; see Kage Bunshin, need more details, and if you want to divide up your chakra like that be my guest but don't say nobody warned you when you use up all your chakra like that.

Mist Waltz; I've always understood this to a B Rank technique. Regardless, it needs a description of how much area is covered by the mist, how thick, how high, etc.

Fire Dragon; More details, too short.

Lightbulb; This jutsu makes no sense, you don't have a light affinity so how could you create a ball of light? A ball of fire maybe, but a ball of light? And the forum needs post measurements, minutes are almost pointless for jutsu to be measured in unless they can't be used in combat.

Lightning Trick; D Rank.

Thunder Clap; Thunder belongs to a clan and is thus denied.

Static Shock; for a jutsu of this rank you'll need to physically touch the object in question. The justu description does not state this.

Lightning Tip; C Rank.

Electrical Enhancer; and what does the electricity actually do or cause?

Offensive Bolt; needs a distance limit between the two projectiles, otherwise you could throwing them both hundreds of feet apart and create a very large and very OP electrical wire to shock opponents.

Lightning Wire Shock; you say it can be done at a lesser rank and not inflict harm, that would make the jutsu variable rank between the non-harmful rank and the harm inflicting one.

Electric Wave; how large? How thick?

Body of Electric Flow; you obviously can't conduct a current through everything and the jutsu needs to reflect that, it also needs a distance limit assigned to it. I'll have to re-read it again later because as it is it sounds very OP and deny worthy.

Thunder Fang; make a note that you can't use the natural speed of a true lightning bolt because if you can this is denied, period. You need to specify how much damage is dealt per chakra amount put in, typcially measured by letter rank. Specifics, specifics.

Pat wrote:

Raiton: Kaminari Shuriken [Lightning Release: Lightning Shuriken]
Rank: B
Requirement: Shuriken.
Description: The user augments the shuriken with Raiton chakra then throws it above his enemy. This will rain down sever bolts of lightning towards the opponent, opening passing over or hitting them. This technique does not require the use of handseals.

Severe or several?

Magnetic Hands; Denied, magnetism is KKG property.

Thunderbolt Strike; how large are the bolts, how far can they travel, how long do they paralyze?

Reverse Polarity; needs a more defined range and also needs a way to be dodged or stopped without being a Raiton user otherwise this is OP because its effectively an undodgable and indefensible attack since you have no manner of seeing the attack coming and no warning before it strikes.

False Darkness; needs a range.

Livewire Flash; what does the electricity do when it reaches its target?
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PostSubject: Re: Littner, Kamina [Hokage] Wed 14 Apr 2010, 4:03 am

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There are still things that remain un addressed that I posted, like a lot of things.

Lava Field: Turning earth to magma requires so much heat power it would be considered a magma jutsu either way.



Art of Fire : Makes no sense to me at all. Making custom jutsu is making custom jutsu with a template.

Meteor Strike: Two wrongs don't make a right.

Chakra can stop the fuel from being burned? How so?

And yeah, Thermal Vision and the other visions would be eijutsu.

Will remove Lava Field and Art of fire

You're right, two wrongs don't make a right, but if you intend to deny me this, you must go through every single app and remove every single Burning Ash Accumulation. You can't say mine isn't feasible while a perfectly unfeasible one also exists ignored.

Chakra can coat the fuel source. Chakra isn't necessarily flammable, and thusly would suffocate the fire

I'll remove Thermal vision and the other ones that you said are Eijutsu.

Hage, I'll do some fixing upping, and I'd appreciate it if you'd stop the rude assumptions. I wasn't making an excuse by saying they weren't mine, simply explaining that as the reason for lack of detail, I wasn't saying it was a reason to not add detail, thanks.
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PostSubject: Re: Littner, Kamina [Hokage] Wed 14 Apr 2010, 4:18 am

Well Pat, if you say that you know of jutsu that have been wrongly checked then it would really be your duty to correct them. I have no idea where these jutsu are so pinning the work on me wouldn't be the right way to go about it seeing as you know where these jutsu are and what needs to be fixed about them. If anything you should talk to whomever approved the application, not tell me that I should go and search every single app and find every single instance of this jutsu. Either way, if this jutsu works in the anime I'd rather believe that its some sort of special combination of chemicals that is referred to as ash then go through every application and deny it.

That would work, but in the case of a large fire there would be too much fuel to cover, then there are also fires in the air that are hurtling towards a target that don't really have a coverable fuel source.

Thermal Vision and others are still there.

And you didn't address everything I've said about your jutsu, only bits and pieces.
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PostSubject: Re: Littner, Kamina [Hokage] Wed 14 Apr 2010, 4:33 am

I know, the others I plan on fixing..

And no, it isn't explained as special chemicals, just plain ash. And if it's cannon, and it's allowed, there is no reason for this to not be allowed. I don't have a problem with burning ash, YOU have the problem, so it's not my job. I refuse to remove meteor strike based on this.

and I know, I haven't fixed them yet.
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PostSubject: Re: Littner, Kamina [Hokage] Wed 14 Apr 2010, 4:41 am

I don't have a problem with anything, your the one that insisted I deny people a cannon jutsu. I wouldn't do that I most likely won't do that, but the that decision has nothing to do with this application. We're not talking about anyone or anything else right now but this application. Your jutsu has a flaw, I'm not saying any similar jutsu have flaws even if they may, I'm saying THAT specific jutsu does. You assuming that I have a problem with other jutsu is, well, an assumption. And I said I'd rather believe its a mix of chemicals referred to as ash, I never said that it was, that was another one of your assumptions apparently. I have no problem with that jutsu, as YOU said, " And if its cannon, and it's allowed, there is no reason for this to be not allowed," your right, there isn't. Case closed. Now lets get back on the matter at hand.
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PostSubject: Re: Littner, Kamina [Hokage] Wed 14 Apr 2010, 4:46 am

and what matter is that?
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PostSubject: Re: Littner, Kamina [Hokage] Wed 14 Apr 2010, 4:54 am

アメカPattycakesンムリ wrote:

Hage, I'll do some fixing upping, and I'd appreciate it if you'd stop the rude assumptions. I wasn't making an excuse by saying they weren't mine, simply explaining that as the reason for lack of detail, I wasn't saying it was a reason to not add detail, thanks.

Wrong head-voice, if you read it in certain tones than anything I write could be insulting, and every word will probably come out like that, but I usually write with the same inflection I habitually speak with, stopping between commas, slow ranting, etc. I know what you heard in your head, somewhat, lots of people do it, came up on Ingoo a lot. Try substituting Hermes or something.

Anyhow, when you've got what you've got done I'll pop back in I suppose...hey, this is really cool, I can write with my eyes closed sweet shit...I wonder how many typos I have onscreen at the moment, maybe its none, that would be totally fucking awesome...two, I made two...anyhow, I'm just ranting to fill out a second paragraph because I hate solo sentences.
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PostSubject: Re: Littner, Kamina [Hokage] Wed 14 Apr 2010, 4:59 am

アメカPattycakesンムリ wrote:
and what matter is that?

Why the matter of your jutsu of course. I said that it would be difficult to light a rock on fire without a catalyst and then you dragged ash into the conversation in a "Well he can do it why can't I manner.". You could simply end the conversation by removing the jutsu like you said you were going to do before, its just one jutsu.

P.S: You still have WIP in your title o.o
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PostSubject: Re: Littner, Kamina [Hokage] Wed 14 Apr 2010, 5:01 am

The Title won't change

Furthermore, my point is valid, why should I remove it? You can light ash, why not Rock? Especially for a pretty the amount of chakra it costs.
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PostSubject: Re: Littner, Kamina [Hokage] Wed 14 Apr 2010, 5:09 am

Concerning title edits...

Press the edit button, I think any post will work, but I'd suggest the first.

Scroll down to the three closed black bars beneath your normal post window, open up the second one. It should contain the option to change your topic title within it, you can't do it without going to that.
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PostSubject: Re: Littner, Kamina [Hokage] Wed 14 Apr 2010, 5:10 am

アメカPattycakesンムリ wrote:

And if it's cannon, and it's allowed, there is no reason for this to not be allowed.


You've answered your own question I suppose, ash and rock are a broad comparison either way.
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