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PostSubject: Kessho, Soma [Kiri Genin] Fri 18 Jan 2013, 11:40 am


KESSHO, SOMA

THE INFO.

Name: Kessho Soma
Nickname: Mist's Crystal Beast
Age: 16
Gender: Male
Appearance: He has spiky, dark blue hair and eyebrows also dark blue. Soma’s eyes are round and blue with dark blue pupils. Whenever is goes in to Killer Intent Mode, his eyes start to Narrow and Sharpen. He often wears baggy clothes a long with a long-sleeve turtle neck shirt which is obviously a very good choice of clothing as he lives in Kirigakure, the coldest place in all of the shinobi world. He also wears blue shoes a lot of the time when he goes out for missions or just to have fun with his friends. He is also often seen holding a yellow skateboard he uses to go around places for either assistance in battle or helping him get to certain locations faster. Soma has his Imperial bow on him back as he is one of the most skilled long range fighters in Kirigakure and he thinks the best of all the genin. He also has a golden arrow on his back next to the Imperial Bow which he uses to silently kill other people without anyone knowing it. Soma’s turtle next shirt is the color blue and has lighter blue jacket around the turtle neck shirt. He keeps his ninja kit items in a pouch on the right side of his waist.
Soma's face looks like a cute little boy but when he gets into battle, all aspects of his face change. Soma's facial expressions change very often. He is very serious about things. Soma is nearly always serious and hardly happy unless he just can't hold it in. His baggy clothes are very annoying for him sometimes and normally during battle, he just takes them off if there is even one little rip or tear on it. Soma has a little sparkle in his eye whenever he looks at either the sun or the moon. Soma weighs about 115 pounds and is about 140cm tall.
Forehead Protector: Around Right Arm
Personality: Soma is generally a composed ninja, though sometimes he can be cold and a know it all sometimes. Soma is a gentle person though looks like he is not. He has a kind heart, lives to protect his teammates and will never betray the one loves the most. As a child, Soma was a quiet but playful child. However, his innate nature is to protect his teammates, and his cold attitude towards those he loves is likely to push them away and keep everyone at a distance. He also happens to be a stickler for details. Sometimes when people mess with him or take him on like a baby, Soma will grab his opponent and squeeze him/her like a teddy bear. When Soma is battle he likes to wait for the opponent to come to him rather than him going to the opponent which would normally lead to a trap. Soma often uses his Long Ranged attacks against his opponent. Soma was a very smart ninja and also when he was in battle, he will start fighting and then gather some Intel about the opponent to find out his weaknesses and strengths to make his opponent struggle in the fight. Soma for the most of the time displays very little caring for things. He holds a twisted and overprotective form of friendship for his clan members and comrades.
His ruthlessness and pleasure in killing shows the other side of him — deadly, violent, and blood thirsty. He possesses a great agility and strength that makes Soma a great killer — definitely not one to be messed with. Soma often suffers a lot in his attempts to help his friends without a single complaint. He puts others before himself without being concerned about his own health or even his life. Soma's greatest weakness was his fear of those obviously more powerful than him (for example the Mizukage or people above his rank who look exceptional.). Soma had been trained as an ninja by his father to be extremely cautious that he only engages in combat provided that victory is absolutely certain.
Clan: Kessho Clan
Nindō: Never Give Up

THE NINJA.

Origin: Mizu no Kuni
Affiliation: Kirigakure
Rank: Genin - C Rank
Specialties: Ninjutsu, Weaponry (Main-Long/Sub-Close)
Elemental Affinities: Doton (Earth Release), Raition (Lightning Release), Shōton (Crystal Release)
Combat Style: Soma is overprotective for those around him so he uses all the strongest possible techniques to defeat his opponent. He first spots the enemy for a long way away and then uses his bow to attempt to kill the enemy. As he shoots the first few arrows, if the enemy is still alive, he attempts to use his Shinjuu Zanshu no Jutsu - Double Suicide Decapitation Technique to trap the opponent and then kill the person from there. Then if that does not work he goes back to shooting arrows at the opponent from a far and as the opponent gets closer, Soma starts to use his Ninjutsu against the opponent. He would normally use jutsu that do not take up too much chakra because it would be a waste if he did, and he did not even need to. Soma is a long distance fighter and only uses close range attacks if the opponent gets close to him. In any situation, if Soma knows the opponent is stronger than him, he would run away from the scene and try to forgot everything that happened in the fight.

Special Characteristics:

Chakra Capacity:
 

One-Handed Seals:
 

Endurance:
 

THE BACKGROUND.

History:
Academy Arc:
 

Genin Arc:
 
Roleplay Sample: Kazuya had just asked Sakuya what scroll she had but she failed to answer the simple question. A few seconds after asking the question, Kazuya's friend in the previous Chuunin Exams Phrase, Tsumi appeared and he asked Kazuya if he needed any help. Kazuya looked over to Tsumi and asked him the same question but in a nicer way since he didn't want the friendship to end just like that. "Tsumi, great to see you again. I know this might be a stupid question but would you mind telling me what scroll you have, it would be most helpful and we would have to end up fighting and breaking our friendship." As Kazuya finished speaking with Tsumi, he turned back to Sakuya who was standing there looking confused but still cautious. Kazuya thought as if he was looking for a fight so Kazuya did so. Kazuya stood up and jumped a tree away from Sakuya. "Tsumi, if she avoids my attacks, attack her from above." Kazuya then threw the exploding take towards Sakuya and threw 2 shuriken, one the the right and one to the left. Kazuya made a plan quickly in order to get the scroll and pass the exams. A few seconds later, he heard an explosion from the opposite direction of where he was. Then he saw the smoke of the explosion from above. 'Definitely Dota' Kazuya thought as he looked back in the direction of his fight awaiting both Tsumi and Sakuya's reactions of his attack.

THE ARSENAL.
Academy Jutsu:
 

Clan Jutsu:
 

Doton Jutsu:
 

Raition Jutsu:
 

Non-Elemental Jutsu:
 

Weaponry Jutsu:
 

Weapons:
 

Ninja Kit:
 

FACE CLAIM.

Character Claim: Zoldyck Killua
Source: Hunter x Hunter
Image URL: http://i13.servimg.com/u/f13/17/81/61/79/54313410.jpg


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PostSubject: Re: Kessho, Soma [Kiri Genin] Sat 19 Jan 2013, 2:39 am



  • Your appearance, personality, combat style and rp sample are all too small.
    - For your appearance I want about one and half to two paragraphs (a paragraph is considered having 250-300 words).
    - For your personality I want at least another solid paragraph.
    - Combat style should be at least one paragraph.
    - And your rp sample needs to be at least 250 words.

  • You need to link the clan to your clan section.

  • You need to specify in your weaponry the main and sub along with ranges. Example; Weaponry (Main:close / Sub: Long)

  • You mention in your history that he is very capable with taijutsu, but you don't have it as a specialty.

  • You don't have any weapons? It's not mandatory, but advised. Also, you can start with a kit, if you want it I have it coded below. If you don't, then ignore that part.

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    [b]Name:[/b] Genin Kit
    [b]Rank:[/b] C
    [b]Quantity:[/b] 1
    [b]Contents:[/b] 6 Kunai [6], 10 Shuriken [5], 9 Senbon [3], 10 Makibishi [2], 4 Exploding Notes [4], 3 Exploding Pouches [1], 3 Smoke Pellets [1], 12m String [4], 1 Windmill Shuriken [5], 1 File & Scissor [1].
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PostSubject: Re: Kessho, Soma [Kiri Genin] Sat 19 Jan 2013, 5:19 am

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PostSubject: Re: Kessho, Soma [Kiri Genin] Sat 19 Jan 2013, 6:05 am



  • You still need a little adding onto your appearance. Give a little facial description for an example. Also, sorry I forgot to mention it earlier, there are some rules towards the appearance of clan members.

    Quote :
    Although not much is known about the Kessho clan, members tend to have dark blue hair and dark eyes.


    Your character's eyes are fine, but there's a problem regarding his hair. You can perhaps say he dyes it, or something really traumatic happened that caused it to turn white (but I need a good description on that traumatic event).

  • Please put a spacing between the paragraphs of your personality. Just to keep it neater and tidier. I find your personality a bit ... harsh for a 12 year old...... a cold blooded killer already?

  • If taijutsu is not in your specialty, you can't really use it. When you rank up, you can add that a bit in.. but not now. Just remove the taijutsu reference in your history.

  • I must deny your weapons. Mostly based on the fact that they would rank up with your character.

    There is a universal bow in here if you want one. You can also of course make a custom one, but it would have to be C rank as you cannot have weapons above your own rank and weapons who have some abilities have to be B rank.
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PostSubject: Re: Kessho, Soma [Kiri Genin] Sat 19 Jan 2013, 7:13 am

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PostSubject: Re: Kessho, Soma [Kiri Genin] Sat 19 Jan 2013, 2:18 pm

Firstly, thanks for applying. ^^ Before we continue, I'll have to ask you to make a few changes.

  • Please remove all the marquees from your profile. They look nice, but firstly, marquees are depricated (no longer in use) in modern HTML for a reason; they're just not realistic. It's extremely hard for someone to read very long blocks of text (that's centered, which is even harder to read) that's scrolling non stop.

  • Your origin is your country, not your shinobi village. Your country should be Mizu no Kuni instead of Kirigakure no Sato.
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PostSubject: Re: Kessho, Soma [Kiri Genin] Sun 20 Jan 2013, 5:13 am

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PostSubject: Re: Kessho, Soma [Kiri Genin] Sun 20 Jan 2013, 5:25 am

From what I can see, other then a couple typos here and there, all this needs is a slightly longer appearance. After that, it should be good. Bump when that's done, and I think you'll be fine.
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PostSubject: Re: Kessho, Soma [Kiri Genin] Sun 20 Jan 2013, 5:34 am

Bump >_>
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PostSubject: Re: Kessho, Soma [Kiri Genin] Sun 20 Jan 2013, 6:13 am

Just a couple things. Mostly nitpicks.

Nickname: You'll need to go into detail either in your Nickname field or in your history as to why your character has coined this nickname. Why do people call him this, and who originally coined the term? I find it hard to believe a genin who runs from formidable foes to be a 'beast'.

Typo?: Just noticed this: "Soon after he turned 15, Soma dyed his hair from silver to dark blue." I think you have it mixed up.. Other than that, it seems okay.
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PostSubject: Re: Kessho, Soma [Kiri Genin] Sun 20 Jan 2013, 6:25 am

Ive asked two people about that Typo thing and there is no error on it. I edited the Nickname thing
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PostSubject: Re: Kessho, Soma [Kiri Genin] Sun 20 Jan 2013, 6:38 am

Quote :
"Soon after he turned 15, Soma dyed his hair from silver to dark blue."
What he is saying is this: your hair has to naturally be dark blue, since that is your clan's trait. You would dye it from dark blue to silver (or bleach it rather). Not the other way around. Sure, the grammar is correct, but the information is confused.

On another note, that picture hardly looks like he is fifteen, but that's fine. Just pointing that out.
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PostSubject: Re: Kessho, Soma [Kiri Genin] Sun 20 Jan 2013, 6:42 am

Edited >_>
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PostSubject: Re: Kessho, Soma [Kiri Genin] Sun 20 Jan 2013, 10:17 am

This looks fine. All of the appearance, personality, and combat style have been expanded. Jutsu and weapons are all pre approved. I'll give this the first approval.

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PostSubject: Re: Kessho, Soma [Kiri Genin] Mon 21 Jan 2013, 12:30 am

(2/2) approved.


Now you should go here and make your account.
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PostSubject: Re: Kessho, Soma [Kiri Genin] Sun 16 Jun 2013, 5:09 pm


Archived.
Due to inactivity.

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